Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime kullanımı var. "something taste sweet" ifadesi yerine "something that tastes sweet" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca "bitter chocolate" yerine "dark chocolate" kullanmak daha uygun. Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve etkili yapmak için bağlaçlar ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and is quite affordable. After finishing my meal, I usually take a piece of chocolate. I prefer milk chocolate rather than dark chocolate because of its creamy taste.

提案: Cevabınızda dolgu kelimeler (uh) fazla kullanılmış ve bazı ifadeler karışık. "fullness hormones are changing" ifadesi yerine "hormonal changes" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız.

例: I eat chocolate every day because I really enjoy it. However, due to hormonal changes during the month, especially when my period begins, I tend to crave chocolate more.

提案: Cevabınızda zaman ifadeleri ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "after the school" yerine "after school" demelisiniz. Ayrıca "she always give me" yerine "she always gave me" daha doğru. Dolgu kelimeleri azaltılmalı ve cümleler daha net kurulmalı.

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate almost every day when I was a kid because I visited my grandparents after school. My grandmother loved tasty treats and always gave me some chocolate when I was there.

提案: Cümlenizde "most of the chocolate are" ifadesi yanlış, "most chocolates are" olmalı. Ayrıca cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz. "versatile" kelimesi bağlamda biraz belirsiz, daha açıklayıcı kelimeler tercih edin.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because most chocolates are affordable and versatile. Therefore, when people find something tasty and inexpensive, they tend to buy it.

提案: "more healthier" ifadesi yanlış, "healthier" yeterlidir. "I couldn't resist myself to eat" yerine "I can't resist eating" daha doğal. Dolgu kelimeleri azaltılmalı ve cümleler daha akıcı olmalı.

例: I really like milk chocolate because it tastes smooth and creamy. However, I know dark chocolate is healthier. Still, I can't resist eating more milk chocolate.

提案: Cümleniz karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "when a boyfriend give to his girlfriend" yerine "when a boyfriend gives chocolate to his girlfriend" demelisiniz. Ayrıca dolgu kelimeleri çok fazla. Cümlelerinizi daha net ve akıcı kurmalısınız.

例: I think it depends. When a boyfriend gives chocolate to his girlfriend, it's a nice gesture. However, for birthdays or more important occasions, I don't think chocolate is the best gift because special occasions usually require more thoughtful or expensive presents.

× Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it's something taste sweet but also very cheap.

✓ Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it's something that tastes sweet but is also very cheap.

The verb 'taste' should be in the third person singular form 'tastes' to agree with the singular subject 'something'. Also, 'something taste sweet' is incorrect; it should be 'something that tastes sweet'. Additionally, 'but also very cheap' needs a verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× When I finish my meal I immediately take a one piece of chocolate and I prefer more milk chocolate than bitter chocolate.

✓ When I finish my meal, I immediately take one piece of chocolate and I prefer milk chocolate more than bitter chocolate.

The phrase 'a one piece' is incorrect; 'one piece' is sufficient. Also, 'prefer more milk chocolate than bitter chocolate' should be 'prefer milk chocolate more than bitter chocolate' for natural word order.

× I think it's popular because most of the chocolate are very cheap to buy and uh, they are also versatile so when people see something tasty and cheap they always tend to buy it.

✓ I think it's popular because most of the chocolates are very cheap to buy and, uh, they are also versatile, so when people see something tasty and cheap, they always tend to buy it.

'Most of the chocolate are' is incorrect because 'chocolate' here should be plural 'chocolates' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I really like milk chocolates because it tastes, uh, smooth and creamy.

✓ I really like milk chocolates because they taste, uh, smooth and creamy.

'Milk chocolates' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'taste' should be plural to agree with the subject.

× However, I know dark chocolate is more healthier.

✓ However, I know dark chocolate is healthier.

'More healthier' is incorrect because 'healthier' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant.

× I couldn't resist myself to eat more milk chocolates.

✓ I couldn't resist eating more milk chocolates.

'Resist' is not followed by a reflexive pronoun and 'to' + verb; it should be followed by the gerund form without 'myself'.

× I think it depends when a boyfriend give to, uh, his girlfriend is a such a good thing.

✓ I think it depends; when a boyfriend gives to, uh, his girlfriend, it is such a good thing.

'Boyfriend' is singular, so the verb should be 'gives'. Also, 'is a such a good thing' is incorrect; it should be 'it is such a good thing'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× But, uh, as a birthday gift or something more, umm, important give.

✓ But, uh, giving it as a birthday gift or for something more, umm, important, is not a good idea.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. The correction provides a complete sentence with proper structure.

× I don't think it's uh, uh, good idea.

✓ I don't think it's, uh, a good idea.

The article 'a' is missing before 'good idea'.

× I think, uh, for special occasion that I need more money to.

✓ I think, uh, for special occasions, I need more money too.

The phrase 'for special occasion that I need more money to' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure and plural form.