Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı açısından bazı hatalar var. "It it feel myself very comfortable when emitting chocolate" ifadesi anlaşılması zor ve doğal değil. Ayrıca, cümleniz fazla uzun ve tekrarlamalar içeriyor. Daha doğal ve akıcı cümleler kurmaya çalışın, ayrıca duygularınızı ifade ederken daha spesifik olun.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel relaxed and happy, especially when I am stressed or sad. I believe that eating just one piece of chocolate can improve my mood significantly.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. "I will be get fatter" ifadesi yanlış. Ayrıca, cümleniz biraz karışık ve doğal değil. Daha açık ve düzgün cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi daha akıcı hale getirin.

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a week. I would like to eat it more often, but I try to limit myself because I am concerned about gaining weight.

提案: Dilbilgisi hataları ve yanlış kelime kullanımları mevcut. "When I'm, when I were a kid" ifadesi yanlış. Ayrıca, "oftenly" kelimesi İngilizcede yoktur. Cümlelerinizi daha doğru ve doğal hale getirmek için temel zaman ve kelime bilgisine dikkat edin.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child, and it reminds me of my childhood. However, my parents sometimes did not buy chocolate for me because they were worried about my weight.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "You will reach the happiness" ifadesi doğal değil. Ayrıca, cümleleriniz biraz dağınık. Daha akıcı ve mantıklı bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi geliştirin.

例: That's a great question. I believe chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of its delicious taste. Moreover, it is easily available in supermarkets, so people can buy and enjoy it anytime, which brings them happiness.

提案: Cümleniz dilbilgisi açısından hatalı ve anlamı net değil. "My favorite flavor with milk chocolate" ifadesi yanlış. Ayrıca, tekrarlar ve anlamsal karışıklık var. Daha açık ve doğru cümleler kurmaya çalışın.

例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it has a smooth and mild taste. Sometimes, other chocolates can be too sweet, which makes them hard to enjoy.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. "Chocolate is core of the happiness" ifadesi doğal değil. Ayrıca, cümleleriniz biraz dağınık. Daha düzgün ve doğal ifadeler kullanmaya çalışın.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it brings happiness to many people. Most people love eating chocolate, so it's a simple and thoughtful present.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because it it feel myself very comfortable when emitting chocolate and it make me happy when I'm get stressed or I'm sad.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel very comfortable when eating chocolate and it makes me happy when I get stressed or I'm sad.

The verbs 'feel', 'make', and 'get' need to be in the correct form to agree with the subject and tense. 'Feel' and 'make' should be in third person singular present tense as 'makes' because the subject is 'it'. 'Get' should be in base form after 'I' in present tense. Also, 'emitting' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'eating'. 'Myself' is unnecessary here.

× I'm pretty sure one chocolate gonna make me very happy.

✓ I'm pretty sure one chocolate is going to make me very happy.

The phrase 'gonna' is informal and should be replaced with 'is going to' for correct modal verb usage in formal speech.

× I think twice a week actually I want to eat more per week, but I mean, I have uh, I, I have some kilogram issues and I will be get fatter if I eat more.

✓ I think twice a week actually I want to eat more per week, but I mean, I have some weight issues and I will get fatter if I eat more.

'Kilogram issues' is incorrect; the correct term is 'weight issues'. Also, 'will be get' is incorrect; it should be 'will get'.

× Yeah, when I'm, when I were a kid, I eat chocolate oftenly and, and it's, it's really remember for my childhood, but my parents sometimes, uh, didn't buy chocolate to home because of my weight problems.

✓ Yeah, when I was a kid, I ate chocolate often and it's really memorable from my childhood, but my parents sometimes didn't buy chocolate for home because of my weight problems.

'When I were' should be 'when I was' for past tense singular. 'Eat' should be 'ate' for past tense. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. 'Really remember' is incorrect; 'really memorable' or 'I really remember' is correct. 'Didn't buy chocolate to home' should be 'didn't buy chocolate for home'.

× You can reach the chocolate very easy from a market supermarket.

✓ You can get chocolate very easily from a supermarket.

'Reach the chocolate' is incorrect; 'get chocolate' is better. 'Very easy' should be 'very easily' as an adverb. 'A market supermarket' is redundant; 'a supermarket' suffices.

× My favorite flavor with milk chocolate, I mean, the taste of milk chocolate feel soft and it's really really, really, really soft because when you eat in chocolate, sometimes it became so sweet and and you you hard to eat that my sweet and.

✓ My favorite flavor is milk chocolate. I mean, the taste of milk chocolate feels soft and it's really, really soft because sometimes when you eat chocolate, it becomes too sweet and it's hard to eat that sweetness.

'Flavor with' should be 'flavor is'. 'Feel' should be 'feels' for third person singular. 'Eat in chocolate' is incorrect; 'eat chocolate' is correct. 'Became' should be 'becomes' for present tense. 'You you hard to eat that my sweet and' is unclear and corrected to 'it's hard to eat that sweetness'.

× Yeah, I think it good to good to give to others because the chocolate is core of the happiness for people.

✓ Yeah, I think it's good to give to others because chocolate is the core of happiness for people.

'It good to good to' is incorrect; should be 'it's good to'. 'The chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as a general concept. 'Core of the happiness' should be 'core of happiness'.