Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，如“more smooth and more smooth”，建议避免重复并使用正确的形容词形式。此外，回答可以更自然流畅，避免机械堆砌词汇。

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious, which always makes me feel happy. I especially like milk chocolate because it has a smooth and creamy texture.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，如“wanted”应为“want”，且句子不完整，缺少情感或原因的具体描述。建议注意时态一致性，并补充完整的细节。

例: Nowadays, I seldom eat chocolate because I want to maintain a healthy diet and keep a good figure. However, in the past, I often ate chocolate, especially when I felt stressed or tired.

提案: 回答中时态混用且有重复表达“enjoy I enjoy”，建议使用过去时态并避免重复，同时句子结构应更清晰。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was young. My parents knew that I enjoyed eating chocolate, so they often bought a lot of it for me.

提案: 回答表达不清，语法混乱，缺乏逻辑和具体内容。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用具体理由支持。

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious, which appeals to many people's preferences.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（如“Creamer”应为“creamier”，“ma”应为“a”），句子结构不完整且表达不够连贯。建议注意拼写和语法，使用连词使表达更流畅。

例: Actually, milk chocolate is my favorite type because it tastes creamier and more delicious. Compared to dark chocolate, I enjoy its smooth texture and mild flavor, which makes it more enjoyable.

提案: 回答语法错误严重，句子不完整且表达混乱，缺乏逻辑。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并提供具体理由和例子。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it. I have a habit of giving chocolates to my friends, which started when I was a child.

× Besides, I specially liked milk chocolate because it was more smooth and more smooth.

✓ Besides, I especially liked milk chocolate because it was smoother.

这里'specially'用错了，应该用副词'especially'表示特别地；'more smooth'重复且不规范，应该用比较级'smoother'。建议记住副词和形容词的正确形式及比较级用法。

× Nowadays I seldom eat chocolate because I wanted to go on a diet and follow a pretty shape.

✓ Nowadays I seldom eat chocolate because I want to go on a diet and maintain a pretty shape.

句子中'Nowadays'表示现在时，'wanted'是过去时，时态不一致。应使用现在时'want'。此外，'follow a pretty shape'表达不自然，改为'maintain a pretty shape'更合适。

× However, in the past I often eat chocolate especially when I felt.

✓ However, in the past I often ate chocolate especially when I felt sad.

'in the past'表示过去，动词应使用过去时'eat'改为'ate'。句子末尾'when I felt'不完整，需补充情绪词如'sad'。

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was young.

'when I was young'表示过去，动词应使用过去时'eat'改为'ate'。

× My parents know that I enjoy I enjoy eating the chocolate, so they often bought a lot of chocolate for me as a result.

✓ My parents knew that I enjoyed eating chocolate, so they often bought a lot of chocolate for me as a result.

句中重复'I enjoy'，应删除重复部分。'know'和'enjoy'应与过去时态保持一致，改为'knew'和'enjoyed'。

× In my opinion, the chocolate tastes good and delicious special with sweet, so this is it, so it gets for everyone's taste, so it is beautiful.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate tastes good and delicious, especially sweet, so it suits everyone's taste and is popular.

句子结构混乱，'special with sweet'表达错误，应为'especially sweet'；'so this is it'和'so it gets for everyone's taste'不通顺，改为'so it suits everyone's taste'。建议简化句子，注意词语搭配。

× Actually, milk chocolate is my favorite type because it tastes more delicious and Creamer.

✓ Actually, milk chocolate is my favorite type because it tastes more delicious and creamier.

'Creamer'是名词，句中应使用形容词'creamier'表示更奶油味。

× There's a black chocolate.

✓ There is dark chocolate.

'black chocolate'不常用，正确表达是'dark chocolate'。此外，句子结构简单，需注意词汇搭配。

× What's more, I enjoy this smooth texture and ma mild flavor which makes it more enjoyable.

✓ What's more, I enjoy its smooth texture and mild flavor, which make it more enjoyable.

'ma'应为'my'或'its'，此处用'its'更合适；'makes'应与复数主语'texture and flavor'一致，改为'make'。

× Yes actually I have a hobby that send chocolate for my friend as a gift so habit was diverted when I was a child.

✓ Yes, actually I have a hobby of sending chocolate to my friends as gifts; this habit started when I was a child.

'have a hobby that send'结构错误，应为'hobby of sending'；'for my friend'应为'to my friends'；'habit was diverted'表达错误，改为'habit started'。

× If I bite a chocolate I would spend lots of.

✓ If I eat chocolate, I would spend a lot on it.

'bite a chocolate'不自然，改为'eat chocolate'；'spend lots of'后缺少宾语，补充'on it'。建议注意完整句子结构。