Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için, cümle yapısını basitleştirin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Ayrıca, neden sevip sevmediğinizi açıkça belirtin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak fikirlerinizi bağlayın.

例: Yes, I like chocolate because it tastes good, but I try to avoid it since it's unhealthy. Instead, I prefer eating protein bars to stay healthy.

提案: Cümlenizi daha doğru ve doğal yapmak için zaman ifadelerini ve bağlaçları doğru kullanın. Ayrıca, neden belirli zamanlarda çikolata yediğinizi açıkça ifade edin.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a month, especially during my period because I crave sugary foods then.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha açık ve doğru yapmak için kelime seçimlerinize dikkat edin ve anlamı netleştirin. Ayrıca, neden çikolatayı sevmediğinizi daha iyi açıklayın.

例: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child because I didn't have a sweet tooth. I preferred savory snacks instead.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha mantıklı ve tutarlı yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları ve karışıklıkları önleyin. Ayrıca, neden çikolatanın popüler olduğunu daha açık ve spesifik şekilde açıklayın.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy sweet tastes, and it can boost mood due to certain chemicals in it.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve anlaşılır yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve tercihlerinizi net ifade edin.

例: I prefer chocolate with nuts rather than plain chocolate. If there are no nuts, I usually don't eat it.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için bağlaçları doğru kullanın ve fikirlerinizi daha açık ifade edin.

例: I don't think chocolate is always a good gift because some people don't like it. I prefer giving flowers instead.

× My answer is yes and no because I like chocolate but I'm not preferred to eat chocolate because this is so unhealthy and I love eating healthy so I'm not prefer I prefer eat protein bar except chocolate.

✓ My answer is yes and no because I like chocolate but I don't prefer to eat chocolate because it is so unhealthy and I love eating healthy, so I prefer to eat protein bars instead of chocolate.

The modal verb 'prefer' was incorrectly used as 'I'm not preferred' and 'I'm not prefer'. The correct form is 'I don't prefer'. Also, 'prefer eat' should be 'prefer to eat'. Additionally, 'this is so unhealthy' should be 'it is so unhealthy' for clarity. The sentence needed corrections in modal verb usage and infinitive verb form.

× I ate chocolate one time in a month because when I was a period I can't stop eating sugary things but I'm not prefer eating chocolate except my period.

✓ I eat chocolate once a month because when I have my period I can't stop eating sugary things, but I don't prefer eating chocolate except during my period.

The sentence incorrectly used past tense 'ate' when present tense 'eat' is appropriate for habitual action. Also, 'when I was a period' is incorrect; it should be 'when I have my period'. Modal verb 'I'm not prefer' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't prefer'. The sentence needed corrections in tense and modal verb usage.

× No because I don't have any sweet tooth, I love hairy things, savory stuffs. So I'm not prefer eat chocolate because I don't like chocolate when I was a child and this is so basic for me.

✓ No, because I don't have a sweet tooth; I love hairy things and savory stuff. So I don't prefer to eat chocolate because I didn't like chocolate when I was a child and this is very basic for me.

'I'm not prefer eat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't prefer to eat'. Also, 'sweet tooth' needs an article 'a'. 'Savory stuffs' should be 'savory stuff' as 'stuff' is uncountable. The past tense 'didn't like' is used correctly for childhood reference. The sentence needed corrections in modal verb usage, article usage, and pluralization.

× Because generally almost every person actually not a person, every woman loves sugar great things because they have a sweet tooth, because of the hormones. So chocolate is so popular and feudal is so popular in around the world because we must eat something so.

✓ Because generally almost every person, actually every woman, loves sugary great things because they have a sweet tooth due to hormones. So chocolate is very popular around the world because we need to eat something sweet.

'Sugar great things' is incorrect; it should be 'sugary great things' or 'sweet things'. 'Feudal' is likely a typo or incorrect word; replaced with 'chocolate' or omitted. 'In around the world' is incorrect; 'around the world' is correct. The sentence needed corrections in pluralization, word choice, and preposition usage.

× I don't know but I prefer eat chocolate with nuts, not basic chocolate. I don't like normal chocolate. I love not so if I don't have any nuts I can't eat.

✓ I don't know, but I prefer to eat chocolate with nuts, not plain chocolate. I don't like normal chocolate. I love it, so if I don't have any nuts, I can't eat it.

'Prefer eat' should be 'prefer to eat'. 'Basic chocolate' is better expressed as 'plain chocolate'. The sentence 'I love not so' is unclear; corrected to 'I love it, so'. Also, added missing pronouns for clarity. The sentence needed corrections in modal verb usage and pronoun usage.

× No, because a lot of people don't like chocolate. So I'm not prefer chocolate, I prefer flowers, so chocolate is not a good idea.

✓ No, because a lot of people don't like chocolate. So I don't prefer chocolate; I prefer flowers, so chocolate is not a good idea.

'I'm not prefer' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't prefer'. The sentence needed correction in modal verb usage.