Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“would eating”应为“would eat”，且表达略显重复和不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意时态和动词形式的正确使用。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy. When I feel stressed, I often eat some chocolate to relax and feel calm.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“3 or 4 * a month”不明确，“it will be honed my teeth”表达错误。建议使用准确的数字表达，避免语法错误，并且句子应简洁明了。

例: I eat chocolate about three or four times a month. Although I enjoy it very much, I try not to eat it often because it is unhealthy and can harm my teeth. So, I limit how much chocolate I eat.

提案: 回答中语法和用词不准确，如“lamented my chance”表达不当，“they will harm our teeth”主语不明确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意主谓一致和词汇准确。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mom thought it was unhealthy and could harm my teeth. So, she limited how much chocolate I could have.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，如“over often associated to”应为“are often associated with”，且“other any others festival”重复。建议使用正确的搭配和简洁表达。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages. Also, chocolates are often associated with big festivals like Christmas and other celebrations.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“bitters and calm”用词不当，句子结构混乱。建议使用准确的形容词，简洁表达喜好和原因。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is milk chocolate because it is not too sweet or bitter. I usually eat it as a snack during my free time, which helps me feel relaxed.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达混乱，如“relate to 10 songs”不相关且不清楚，重复使用“for those”。建议直接表达观点，避免无关内容和重复。

例: I think chocolate is a good gift because many people enjoy sweet treats. However, it might not be suitable for those who don't like chocolate.

× Besides, when I feel stressful, I would eating some chocolate to relieve the stress and make me feel peace.

✓ Besides, when I feel stressed, I would eat some chocolate to relieve the stress and make me feel peace.

这里“would eating”是错误的动词形式，情态动词would后面应该接动词原形eat，而不是动名词eating。并且“feel stressful”应改为“feel stressed”，因为“stressful”是形容词，表示“令人有压力的”，而“stressed”表示“感到有压力的”。

× I eat chocolate about 3 or 4 * a month.

✓ I eat chocolate about 3 or 4 times a month.

这里缺少复数名词“times”来表示次数，数字3或4后面应接复数名词。

× Although I find it very delicious and enjoyed it a lot, I tried not to eat too often because it is not good for our health and it is it will be honed my teeth if I eat too much.

✓ Although I find it very delicious and enjoy it a lot, I try not to eat it too often because it is not good for our health and it will harm my teeth if I eat too much.

时态不一致，前半句应保持现在时态“enjoy”，后半句“tried”应改为现在时“try”，因为描述的是习惯。句中“it is it will be honed my teeth”语法错误，应改为“it will harm my teeth”。

× Therefore I limit my chocolate intake to maintain advanced.

✓ Therefore, I limit my chocolate intake to maintain good health.

“maintain advanced”表达不正确，应该用“maintain good health”来表达保持健康。

× No because when I was a kid my mom always lamented my chance to eat chocolate because chocolate is not good for our health and they will harm our teeth so that my mom limit my chocolate intake to stay my health.

✓ No, because when I was a kid my mom always limited my chance to eat chocolate because chocolate is not good for our health and it will harm our teeth, so my mom limited my chocolate intake to keep me healthy.

“lamented”用错，应该是“limited”，表示限制。主谓一致错误，“my mom limit”应为“my mom limited”。“stay my health”表达错误，应为“keep me healthy”。

× I think the reason is it's rich sweet taste that appeals to peoples of all ages and also chocolates over often associated to some huge festivals like Christmas or other any others festival.

✓ I think the reason is its rich sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages and also chocolates are often associated with some big festivals like Christmas or other festivals.

“it's”应为“its”，表示所有格。复数名词“peoples”应为“people”。“over often”应为“are often”。“associated to”应为“associated with”。“other any others festival”表达重复，应简化为“other festivals”。

× My favorite flavor chocolate is milk chocolate because it is not too sweet or bitters and calm and I usually eat them when I have some free time and I eat them at snacks which will, uh, make me feel peace.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because it is not too sweet or bitter and is mild, and I usually eat it when I have some free time as a snack, which makes me feel peaceful.

“bitters”应为“bitter”，形容词单数形式。用词“calm”不合适，改为“mild”。“eat them at snacks”表达错误，应为“eat it as a snack”。“make me feel peace”应为“make me feel peaceful”。

× I see you relate to 10 songs who you want to give the chocolate to.

✓ I think you relate to 10 people to whom you want to give the chocolate.

句子结构混乱，“songs”应为“people”，“who you want to give the chocolate to”应改为“to whom you want to give the chocolate”，避免句尾介词。

× Some people enjoy chocolate because they have sweet tooth and like eating sweet.

✓ Some people enjoy chocolate because they have a sweet tooth and like eating sweets.

“sweet tooth”前应加不定冠词“a”。“eating sweet”应为“eating sweets”，复数形式表示甜食。

× In my opinion, chocolate must be a great gift, but for those for those who do not like chocolate, it probably would not be a good present for them.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate must be a great gift, but for those who do not like chocolate, it probably would not be a good present for them.

“for those for those”重复，应去掉一个。