Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“send”应为“sends”，并且可以增加更多细节使回答更丰富。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious. For instance, my girlfriend always sends me chocolates on Valentine's Day, which makes the gift very special.

提案: 注意语法错误，“is harm”应为“is harmful”，并且可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I eat chocolate about once a month because I think eating too much chocolate is harmful to health due to its high sugar content.

提案: 时态使用不当，应使用过去时；避免口语填充词“uh”；句子结构需更自然。

例: I didn't often eat chocolate when I was a child because my parents always prevented me from eating sweet foods as they are bad for teeth and health.

提案: 句子结构较简单，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明巧克力的特殊意义。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because people generally enjoy sweet foods, and chocolate is often associated with special occasions like Valentine's Day, which adds to its appeal.

提案: 表达不够清晰，重复词语“the the”，建议简化句子并明确表达喜好。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is the plain one because I don't like chocolates with added ingredients like milk or fruit.

提案: 句子结构简单，建议使用连接词并丰富理由，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift for birthdays or special occasions because most people enjoy sweet foods, and chocolate is a popular and thoughtful choice.

× my girlfriend always send me a chocolate on Valentine's Day.

✓ my girlfriend always sends me a chocolate on Valentine's Day.

主语是第三人称单数（my girlfriend），谓语动词send应加-s变为sends，表示习惯性动作。

× it contains too much sugar, which is harm to health.

✓ it contains too much sugar, which is harmful to health.

形容词harmful用来修饰health，表示对健康有害，原句中用harm是不正确的词性。

× I don't often eat chocolate in the past, uh, when I was a child, my parents always prevent me from eating sweet food because it's bad for teeth or health.

✓ I didn't often eat chocolate in the past, uh, when I was a child, my parents always prevented me from eating sweet food because it was bad for teeth or health.

描述过去的习惯动作，否定句应使用过去时态didn't，动词prevent和be动词也应使用过去式prevented和was。

× the people always like eating sweet food and also chocolate has a special meaning or particular festival such as Valentine's Day.

✓ people always like eating sweet food and also chocolate has a special meaning or particular festival such as Valentine's Day.

the people指特定人群，原句应去掉定冠词the，泛指人们时用people。

× my favorite is chocolate is the regular one because I don't like other things at the the chocolate such as the milk chocolate or fruit chocolate.

✓ my favorite chocolate is the regular one because I don't like other things in the chocolate such as milk chocolate or fruit chocolate.

表示“在巧克力中”的介词应为in，而不是at；另外去掉多余的the。

× it is a good gift to someone on his birthday or special festival because people always like sweet food and chocolate is the best choice.

✓ it is a good gift for someone on their birthday or special festival because people always like sweet food and chocolate is the best choice.

gift的搭配介词应为for；someone的性别不确定，使用their更合适。