Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น การพูดถึง Larry และควรใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างมีเหตุผล

例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it is too sweet for me. Also, I am trying to eat healthily, so I avoid sweets like chocolate.

提案: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจน หลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ถูกต้องและคำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'I said don't eat chocolate' และ 'I have a prevent for several snacks'

例: I rarely eat chocolate because I don't like sweets and I try to keep a healthy lifestyle.

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างที่ดี หลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ถูกต้องและคำพูดที่ไม่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'chocolate as a kiss' และ 'limited my intact instant' ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและเชื่อมโยงประโยคอย่างเหมาะสม

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mother was concerned about my health and limited sweets. I preferred candies or ice cream instead.

提案: คำตอบควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ หลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เข้าใจและคำที่สะกดผิด เช่น 'violent', 'light tide', 'male' ควรอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a rich and sweet taste. Also, there are many types like dark, milk, and white chocolate to suit different preferences.

提案: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'flavour' และ 'citrus' แทน 'city' รวมถึงใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างเหมาะสม

例: My favourite flavour is mint chocolate because it is refreshing and I like to eat it after meals. I also enjoy white chocolate with orange, which has a nice citrus taste.

提案: คำตอบควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'choose' แทน 'shoot' และ 'make another gift' ควรอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม

例: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because many people like it. There are various flavours, so you can easily choose one that the person will enjoy. Also, chocolate is easy to buy and nicely packaged.

× Larry prefers a very snack over sweet ones.

✓ Larry prefers a savory snack over sweet ones.

The word 'snack' is countable and singular here, so 'a very snack' is incorrect. The correct adjective is 'savory' (meaning salty or spicy), not 'very'. The sentence should be 'Larry prefers a savory snack over sweet ones.'

× I have a prevent for several snacks and I try to avoid chocolate to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

✓ I have a preference for several snacks and I try to avoid chocolate to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

The word 'prevent' is a verb meaning to stop something, but the intended word is 'preference', a noun meaning liking. Also, 'preference for' is the correct prepositional phrase. So, 'I have a preference for several snacks' is correct.

× No, I didn't often eat chocolate as a kiss because my mom was quite, uh, concerned about my health and limited my intact instant.

✓ No, I didn't often eat chocolate as a kid because my mom was quite concerned about my health and limited my intake of instant snacks.

The word 'kiss' is a typo for 'kid'. 'Intact instant' is incorrect; likely intended 'intake of instant snacks'. The past tense 'didn't often eat' is correct. The sentence is corrected for word choice and clarity.

× I prefer of others with like candies or ice cream, which I found more appearing at the time.

✓ I preferred others like candies or ice cream, which I found more appealing at the time.

The phrase 'prefer of others with like' is incorrect. The correct form is 'preferred others like'. Also, 'appearing' should be 'appealing' to mean attractive or pleasant.

× Chocolate's popularity can be attributed to is rich and sweetest which appear to are violent or people with light tide like male dark and white chocolate is catered to different preference.

✓ Chocolate's popularity can be attributed to its rich and sweet taste, which appeals to a variety of people. Dark and white chocolate cater to different preferences.

The original sentence has many errors: 'is' should be 'its'; 'sweetest' should be 'sweet'; 'appear to are violent' is incorrect and replaced with 'appeals to'; 'light tide like male' is unclear and replaced with 'a variety of people'; 'is catered' changed to 'cater' to agree with plural subject; 'preference' pluralized to 'preferences'.

× Uh, favorite chocolate in my favorites because I enjoy the combination of chocolate with other flavor. Mint chocolate is refreshing and prefer after meal. White orange chocolate has a city that I find.

✓ My favorite chocolate is mint because I enjoy the combination of chocolate with other flavors. Mint chocolate is refreshing and I prefer it after a meal. White orange chocolate has a citrusy taste that I like.

The sentence had missing subjects and verbs, incorrect word forms ('flavor' should be plural 'flavors'; 'prefer after meal' missing subject; 'city' should be 'citrusy'). The corrections fix these errors for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I believe chocolate is an excellent gift choice because more people like it.

✓ Yes, I believe chocolate is an excellent gift choice because many people like it.

'More people' is comparative and requires a comparison object. Here, 'many people' is appropriate to express a large number without comparison.

× You can find different flavors so it's easy to shoot one, uh, that the person will like.

✓ You can find different flavors so it's easy to choose one that the person will like.

The word 'shoot' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'choose' when selecting something.

× Additionally, chocolate is easy to buy and make another gift.

✓ Additionally, chocolate is easy to buy and makes a great gift.

The phrase 'make another gift' is awkward and incorrect. The corrected sentence uses 'makes a great gift' to express the intended meaning clearly.