Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达“我认为”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。可以增加连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and helps to calm my nerves when I'm anxious.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“for relax”应为“to relax”，并且句子较长且重复。建议简洁表达并注意语法。

例: I eat chocolate every day because I find it delicious and it helps me relax. For instance, I usually have some chocolate for breakfast.

提案: 回答中出现了时态错误和重复表达，建议使用正确的过去时态并简化句子结构。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my parents didn't allow me to have too many sweets. I used to ask my mom for chocolate, but she usually said no.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议补充完整句子并提供具体原因。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich taste and versatility. People often give chocolate as gifts during festivals and celebrations.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不清晰的表达，如“Milky or ram”，建议使用准确词汇并简洁表达。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because I enjoy its creamy and smooth taste.

提案: 回答中句子不完整且语法错误较多，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达观点。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is often seen as a symbol of happiness and good wishes.

× the reasons are chocolate can make me feel happy because I think something sweet is good for my emotion

✓ the reason is chocolate can make me feel happy because I think something sweet is good for my emotion

这里'reasons'应为单数形式'reason'，因为后面只提到了一个原因。主谓一致要求单复数匹配。

× I always eat chocolate for relax and calm down

✓ I always eat chocolate to relax and calm down

动词不定式'to relax'用来表示目的，不能用'for'加动词原形。

× my parents do not did not allow me to have so much sweet food such as chocolate or candies

✓ my parents did not allow me to have so much sweet food such as chocolate or candies

这里出现了双重否定'do not did not'，应去掉'do not'，只用过去式'did not'。

× But I always request my mom to allow me to have a piece of chocolate but unfortunately they wouldn't allow me

✓ But I always asked my mom to allow me to have a piece of chocolate but unfortunately she wouldn't allow me

前文提到的是'my mom'，单数，后文用'they'指代不正确，应改为'she'。

× the reason that chocolate can be popular worldwide because of its rich

✓ the reason that chocolate can be popular worldwide is because of its richness

'because of its rich'中'rich'应为名词形式'richness'，表示'丰富'。

× And people always use chocolate when they celebrate some festivals or in some celebrations

✓ And people always use chocolate when they celebrate some festivals or during some celebrations

'in some celebrations'结构不完整，应该用介词'during'表示在庆祝期间。

× For me I would say it is milk chocolate because during I enjoy the taste of chocolate I can also have Milky or ram with it at the same time

✓ For me I would say it is milk chocolate because while I enjoy the taste of chocolate I can also have milk or cream with it at the same time

'during I enjoy'用法错误，应使用连词'while'；'Milky or ram'拼写错误，应为'milk or cream'。

× Use chocolate as a gift to other Have good meanings for them

✓ Using chocolate as a gift to others has good meanings for them

句子缺少主语，'other'应为复数'others'，且动词形式需调整为第三人称单数'has'。