Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. For example, say "I have a busy schedule" instead of "I always has a busy schedule" and explain the reason more naturally.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I have a busy schedule, and it helps me relax and feel motivated.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and some redundancy. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repeating the word "chocolate" unnecessarily. Also, say "healthy" as "health" and improve sentence flow.

例: I don't eat chocolate often because it is quite sweet and not very good for our health.

提案: Your answer has tense inconsistency and unclear phrasing. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Also, clarify your points and avoid confusing expressions like "avoid me to eat". Try to be more specific and concise.

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because my parents tried to limit my sugar intake and encouraged me to have a balanced diet.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. The word "Trucklex" seems incorrect or irrelevant. Try to give a clear reason why chocolate is popular, such as its taste, cultural significance, or as a gift. Use correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and is often given as a romantic gift.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has awkward phrasing and grammar mistakes. Use correct expressions like "dark chocolate with a certain percentage" and avoid incorrect words like "sweetie". Also, explain your preference clearly.

例: My favourite chocolate is dark chocolate with a moderate cocoa percentage because I don't like sweets that are too sugary, but I still want a nice treat.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear terms like "Truck Lakes". Try to give clear reasons why chocolate is a good gift, such as its popularity and availability. Use correct grammar and sentence structure.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is easy to buy and many people enjoy receiving it.

× Yes, I love eating chocolates because I always has a busy schedule, so eating chocolates can make me have a way to ease my motivations.

✓ Yes, I love eating chocolates because I always have a busy schedule, so eating chocolates can help me find a way to ease my motivations.

The verb 'has' is incorrect because the subject 'I' requires the base form 'have' in the present tense. 'Has' is used with third person singular subjects only.

× No, I don't often eat chocolates because chocolates is kind of sweet food and it is not good for our healthy so I don't eat chocolate much.

✓ No, I don't often eat chocolate because chocolate is a kind of sweet food and it is not good for our health, so I don't eat chocolate much.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the food in general. Also, 'healthy' is an adjective, but here the noun 'health' is needed.

× No, I don't often eat chocolates because chocolates is kind of sweet food and it is not good for our healthy so I don't eat chocolate much.

✓ No, I don't often eat chocolate because chocolate is a kind of sweet food and it is not good for our health, so I don't eat chocolate much.

The verb 'is' is correct with singular 'chocolate'. The original sentence incorrectly used plural 'chocolates' with singular verb 'is', causing subject-verb disagreement.

× No, I don't often eat chocolates when I was a kid because my parents always try to avoid me to eat some sugar, fruits and try to help me to maintain a balanced diet, but it is not quite working.

✓ No, I didn't often eat chocolates when I was a kid because my parents always tried to prevent me from eating sugar and fruits and tried to help me maintain a balanced diet, but it did not quite work.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't' and 'try' with past time 'when I was a kid'. The verbs should be in past tense to match the time frame. Also, 'avoid me to eat' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'prevent me from eating'.

× No, I don't often eat chocolates when I was a kid because my parents always try to avoid me to eat some sugar, fruits and try to help me to maintain a balanced diet, but it is not quite working.

✓ No, I didn't often eat chocolates when I was a kid because my parents always tried to prevent me from eating sugar and fruits and tried to help me maintain a balanced diet, but it did not quite work.

The phrase 'avoid me to eat' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'prevent me from eating'. Also, 'try to help me to maintain' is better as 'tried to help me maintain' without 'to' after 'help'.

× Because Trucklex is a romantic symbols promoted by many shoppers.

✓ Because Trucklex is a romantic symbol promoted by many shoppers.

The sentence has a subject-verb agreement error and incorrect plural form. 'Symbols' should be singular 'symbol' to agree with 'is'. Also, the sentence is a fragment and should be connected to a main clause or rephrased.

× My favorite chocolate is several percent dark because I don't really like too sweetie, but I want some to make a treat for myself.

✓ My favorite chocolate is dark with several percent cocoa because I don't really like it too sweet, but I want some to treat myself.

'Too sweetie' is incorrect; 'sweetie' is a noun or term of endearment, but here the adjective 'sweet' is needed. Also, 'several percent dark' is awkward; better to say 'dark with several percent cocoa'. 'Make a treat for myself' is better as 'treat myself'.

× My favorite chocolate is several percent dark because I don't really like too sweetie, but I want some to make a treat for myself.

✓ My favorite chocolate is dark with several percent cocoa because I don't really like it too sweet, but I want some to treat myself.

The phrase 'too sweetie' is incorrect; 'sweet' is the correct adjective to describe taste. Also, 'several percent dark' is not a natural expression; 'dark with several percent cocoa' is clearer.

× Yes, I think it is a good to use chocolate as a gift to others because Truck Lakes is easy to buy and it's all they can make People love his favourites.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others because chocolates are easy to buy and they can make people love their favorites.

The phrase 'a good to use' is incorrect; 'good' should not have 'a' here. 'Gift to others' is better as 'gift for others'. 'Truck Lakes' seems to be a mishearing or typo; assuming 'chocolates' is intended. Also, 'it's all they can make People love his favourites' is unclear and ungrammatical; corrected to 'they can make people love their favorites'.