Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达的意思不够清晰，语法和用词有误，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的表达方式，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and excited by releasing dopamine in my brain.

提案: 回答不够连贯且有语法错误，表达不清楚。建议使用简单明了的句子，说明频率并给出合理原因。

例: I eat chocolate once a week because I believe a small amount of sweets is good for the body.

提案: 回答基本符合要求，但语法和用词需改进，建议注意动词时态和单复数形式，表达更自然。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because children usually like sweet food, which makes them feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答内容不够准确且表达混乱，建议避免不恰当的比较和表述，使用更合适的词汇和逻辑连接。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy sweet tastes, which can make them feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答不清楚且有语法错误，建议明确表达喜欢的口味并说明原因，避免使用模糊词汇。

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is not very sweet and suits my taste.

提案: 回答表达不够流畅，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点并使用连词。

例: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea if the person likes it because chocolate can make people feel happy and relaxed.

× I like eating chocolate because it can make me feel more happiness and sweet and it can make me more dopamine and let me feel excited.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it can make me feel happier and sweeter, and it can increase my dopamine and make me feel excited.

这里“more happiness”应改为比较级“happier”，因为happiness是名词，需用形容词形式；“sweet”应改为“sweeter”，表示比较级；“make me more dopamine”表达不正确，应改为“increase my dopamine”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Once a week because I think humans body need to take a sweat ingredient. A few will time.

✓ Once a week because I think the human body needs to take some sweet ingredients occasionally.

“humans body”应为“the human body”，表示单数；“a sweat ingredient”应为“some sweet ingredients”，“sweat”是“汗”，应为“sweet”；“A few will time”表达不清，应改为“occasionally”表示偶尔。

× Yes, I usually ate many chocolate when I was a kid because I think children always like sweet food and it can makes them feel more happy and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I usually ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I think children always like sweet food and it can make them feel happier and more relaxed.

“many chocolate”应为“a lot of chocolate”或“many chocolates”，因为chocolate不可数；“can makes”应为“can make”，动词与情态动词搭配时用原形；“more happy”应为“happier”，比较级形式。

× Because people prefer sweet food to better food. In America, as we know many white people, they very like eating sweet food. It can relax our dopamine, so they very like it.

✓ Because people prefer sweet food to better food. In America, as we know, many white people really like eating sweet food. It can increase dopamine, so they like it very much.

“they very like”应为“they really like”或“they like very much”，副词位置错误；“relax our dopamine”表达不当，应为“increase dopamine”。

× MMM absolutely deaf because it not very sweet. I think it's more suitable for me. I love that uh, food is not sweet.

✓ MMM absolutely deaf because it is not very sweet. I think it's more suitable for me. I love that the food is not sweet.

“it not very sweet”缺少动词“is”；“that uh, food”应为“that the food”，冠词使用错误。

× Yes I think use chocolate as gift give someone is good if the people like eating chocolate because chocolate can makes people feel happy and relaxed so I think it can brand happy to them.

✓ Yes, I think using chocolate as a gift to give someone is good if the person likes eating chocolate because chocolate can make people feel happy and relaxed, so I think it can bring happiness to them.

“use chocolate as gift give someone”结构不正确，应为“using chocolate as a gift to give someone”；“the people”应为“the person”或“people”，根据上下文；“can makes”应为“can make”；“brand happy”应为“bring happiness”，词汇错误。