Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“make me feel unwanted”应为“make me feel wanted”或“make me feel good”。建议注意表达的准确性，避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I definitely like eating chocolate because it can make me feel happy. For example, chocolate increases dopamine levels in the brain, which improves my mood. However, I try not to eat too much because it can lead to weight gain.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法不流畅的问题，建议简洁明了地表达频率，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然。

例: I usually eat chocolate about twice a week because I think that's an appropriate frequency. For example, I often eat chocolate while working or writing papers to keep myself energized.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单句表达过去的习惯，并用连词连接观点。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a child. My parents didn't want me to eat it because they thought it was junk food. However, as I grew older, I started to like chocolate more.

提案: 回答内容较为简单，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，并提供更具体的原因。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because people enjoy sweet foods. For example, sweets can trigger the release of chemicals like dopamine in the brain, which makes people feel happy and crave more.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法和词汇错误较多。建议明确表达喜好并用简单句说明原因。

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is sweet milk chocolate because I don't like bitter tastes. For example, I usually avoid dark chocolate because it is too bitter for me.

提案: 回答未完成且表达不流畅。建议完整表达观点，使用连词连接句子，并举例说明。

例: Yes, I think chocolate can be a good gift, but it depends on the occasion. For example, it might not be suitable for a business opening, but it is perfect for a friend's birthday.

× chocolate can increase my dopamine concentration that make me feel happy.

✓ chocolate can increase my dopamine concentration that makes me feel happy.

这里的主语是单数的"dopamine concentration"，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式"makes"，而不是原句中的"make"。

× And on the hard hand, umm I don't want to eat too much chocolate because it may make me fat.

✓ On the other hand, umm I don't want to eat too much chocolate because it may make me fat.

短语应为"on the other hand"，表示转折，原句中写成了"on the hard hand"，是错误的搭配。

× Maybe twice a week, umm, because I, because I think it's, uh, appropriate frequent.

✓ Maybe twice a week, umm, because I think it's an appropriate frequency.

"frequent"是形容词，句中需要名词"frequency"来表达"频率"的意思，同时需要冠词"an"。

× For example, when I was doing some work and, uh, for, and I will write some papers in this time I will eat chocolate.

✓ For example, when I am doing some work or writing papers, I will eat chocolate at that time.

原句结构混乱，时态不一致，且连接词使用不当。改为现在进行时和将来时的合理搭配，表达更清晰。

× Often in my child I will eat other snacks.

✓ Often in my childhood I would eat other snacks.

"child"是名词，表示孩子，正确表达应为"childhood"表示童年；同时时态用过去习惯时"would"更合适。

× Umm because my parents say don't they didn't want me to eat chocolate because they think it's junk food.

✓ Umm because my parents said they didn't want me to eat chocolate because they think it's junk food.

原句中"say don't they didn't"结构错误，应改为过去时"said"，且去掉多余的否定词。

× Umm yes, but however when I grow I think chocolate is good.

✓ Umm yes, but however when I grow up I think chocolate is good.

"grow"需要搭配副词"up"构成短语"grow up"表示成长。

× The major reason is is the people like eating sweet food.

✓ The major reason is that people like eating sweet food.

"is is"重复，应改为"is that"引导宾语从句。

× For example, sweet food can increase some chemical compound concentration and it will make people happy, so they were eager to eat it.

✓ For example, sweet food can increase some chemical compound concentration and it will make people happy, so they are eager to eat it.

时态不一致，前文为一般现在时，"were"应改为一般现在时"are"。

× I love the Pearl sweet chocolate because I don't like another flavor such as bit bitter.

✓ I love the Pearl sweet chocolate because I don't like other flavors such as a bit bitter.

"another"用于单数，复数应使用"other"；"bit bitter"前应加冠词"a"。

× Umm because it it will make me I I don't like it.

✓ Umm because it will make me feel bad, I don't like it.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语动词"feel"，且重复词语应删除。

× It's her food feels better.

✓ It makes the food taste better.

原句中"It's her food feels better"结构错误，改为"It makes the food taste better"更符合表达。

× For example, I will not choose the food like like Fitbit.

✓ For example, I will not choose food like Fitbit.

"the food"改为泛指"food"更合适；"like like"重复，应去掉一个。

× Yes, definitely, but it also depends on the situation, because in some occasions it's not appropriate.

✓ Yes, definitely, but it also depends on the situation because in some occasions it's not appropriate.

逗号使用不当，连接词"because"前不需要逗号。

× For example, if if if you if somebody opens their company, you send chocolate is not good, but if some if your friend's birthday and the.

✓ For example, if somebody opens their company, sending chocolate is not good, but if it's your friend's birthday, then it is appropriate.

原句重复且不完整，需简化并补全句子，使表达完整且符合语法。