Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise by combining ideas and avoiding listing brands unnecessarily. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it instantly makes me happy and even helps reduce stress and anxiety, which are some of its health benefits.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words properly. Also, avoid redundancy and be more precise with your time expressions.

例: I used to eat chocolate daily, but now that I'm on a diet, I only have it once a week.

提案: Your answer provides good details but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and link your ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I loved chocolate as a kid and used to eat four to five chocolates a day, which often got me scolded by my parents.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words. Try to avoid hesitation sounds and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and fluent.

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious, brings instant happiness, and is enjoyed by people of all ages.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words effectively.

例: I prefer dark chocolate over milk chocolate because it has more health benefits and is less sugary, which suits my taste.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Avoid filler words and incorrect expressions. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: In my opinion, giving chocolate as a gift is thoughtful because most people around the world like it, making it a popular and appreciated present.

× Well, I used to eat chocolate on daily basis but since now I'm on a diet therefore I eat chocolate every week.

✓ Well, I used to eat chocolate on a daily basis but since now I'm on a diet, I eat chocolate only every week.

The phrase 'on daily basis' is missing the article 'a'. The correct expression is 'on a daily basis'. Also, the sentence needed a comma before 'therefore' and 'only' was added for clarity.

× Yes, I was fond of chocolate since I was a kid and I remember I used to eat 4 to 5 chocolates per day and I get scolded by my parents because I was a really big eater of chocolates.

✓ Yes, I was fond of chocolate since I was a kid and I remember I used to eat 4 to 5 chocolates per day and I got scolded by my parents because I was a really big eater of chocolates.

The phrase 'I get scolded' is in present tense but the context is past. It should be 'I got scolded' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think chocolate really tastes good and it makes people happy instantly and it's enjoyable by by every age group.

✓ I think chocolate really tastes good and it makes people happy instantly and it's enjoyed by every age group.

The phrase 'enjoyable by by every age group' is incorrect. The correct form is 'enjoyed by every age group'. Also, there was a repeated word 'by'.

× Therefore, dark chocolate is one of my favorite chocolate type.

✓ Therefore, dark chocolate is one of my favorite chocolate types.

The phrase 'one of my favorite chocolate type' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun. It should be 'chocolate types'.

× My lips, in my opinion, it's a really thoughtful and good pressure to give chocolate to others and uh, since it's like by everyone around the globe, therefore it's a good gift item to be gifted.

✓ In my opinion, it's a really thoughtful and good gesture to give chocolate to others and, since it's liked by everyone around the globe, it's a good gift item.

The phrase 'My lips' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or misuse. It should be 'In my opinion'. Also, 'pressure' is incorrect in this context; 'gesture' fits better. 'It's like by everyone' should be 'it's liked by everyone'. The phrase 'to be gifted' is redundant and removed for clarity.