Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi, tuy nhiên câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I am a person, have a sweet tooth' nên là 'I have a sweet tooth'.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. I usually eat it in my free time to boost my mood and energy.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn về tần suất ăn chocolate và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc chưa mạch lạc. Hãy sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: I often eat chocolate during my free time, but I try to limit it because eating too much can cause weight gain.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ.

例: Yes, I loved eating chocolate when I was a child because I enjoyed sweet foods very much.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên chuẩn bị câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh sử dụng từ không rõ nghĩa như 'this test'.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains sugar and ingredients that can boost our mood and make us feel happier.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp chưa chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi như 'which is have' và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: My favourite flavour is the original one because I think adding other flavours like strawberry can make the chocolate lose its original taste.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng cấu trúc câu lộn xộn và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sắp xếp câu hợp lý, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ chính xác hơn như 'give' thay vì 'keep'.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because people often give it on occasions like Valentine's Day. Chocolate is sweet and can make people feel happy.

× I am a person, have a sweet tooth, so in my leisure time I usually eat chocolate to boost my mood and retrain my energy.

✓ I am a person who has a sweet tooth, so in my leisure time I usually eat chocolate to boost my mood and retain my energy.

The phrase 'have a sweet tooth' needs a subject 'who has' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'retrain' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'retain' meaning to keep or maintain energy.

× Well I often eat chocolate or whenever I want to eat and mostly in my free time but I but because it's can lead to fat and obesity so I have to limit my time to eat sweet food.

✓ Well, I often eat chocolate whenever I want to, mostly in my free time, but because it can lead to fat and obesity, I have to limit my time eating sweet food.

The modal verb 'can' should not be preceded by 'it's'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs commas and conjunctions to clarify meaning.

× Yes, absolutely, when I was a child I have strong passion for eating sweet food, mostly chocolate because because I just enjoy so many dry are the same with me. I think that.

✓ Yes, absolutely, when I was a child I had a strong passion for eating sweet food, mostly chocolate, because I just enjoyed it. Many others are the same as me, I think.

The verb tense should be past tense 'had' and 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame. The sentence is also fragmented and unclear, so it was rephrased for clarity.

× I think it's depend on this test, like, uh, sweet and sugar in chocolate and with it are ingredients and compound that can boost, uh, almost and can make we feel happier than.

✓ I think it depends on the taste, like the sweetness and sugar in chocolate, and its ingredients and compounds that can boost mood and make us feel happier.

The pronouns 'it' and 'we' were incorrectly used. 'It depends' is correct, and 'make us feel' is the proper pronoun usage. Also, 'test' should be 'taste'.

× Well, I would say is original flavor because I don't want to be a chocolate which is have a variety of flavor such as strawberry and that's make chocolate lost some flavor.

✓ Well, I would say the original flavor because I don't want chocolate that has a variety of flavors such as strawberry, as that makes chocolate lose some of its flavor.

The sentence had incorrect adjective and verb forms: 'is original flavor' should be 'the original flavor'; 'which is have' should be 'that has'; 'that's make' should be 'that makes'; 'lost' should be 'lose'.

× Yes, of course, because in some occasion people use usually keep chocolate to someone like Valentine's Day and someday because chocolate really lovely and sweet that make people feel happy and joyful.

✓ Yes, of course, because on some occasions people usually give chocolate to someone, like on Valentine's Day and other special days, because chocolate is really lovely and sweet and makes people feel happy and joyful.

The prepositions 'in some occasion' and 'use usually keep chocolate to someone' are incorrect. Correct prepositions are 'on some occasions' and 'usually give chocolate to someone'. Also, sentence structure was improved for clarity.