Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“it is taste sweet”应为“it tastes sweet”，并且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy. For example, I often buy chocolate cake or chocolate bread as snacks in my daily life.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅，如“it's I can't control myself”应改为“I can't control myself”。建议使用更简洁的句子，并注意连贯性。

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a week because, although it is delicious, I can't control myself if I eat too much.

提案: 句子结构不够自然，存在语法错误，如“although I very like eating chocolate”应为“although I liked eating chocolate very much”。建议调整句子顺序，使表达更自然。

例: No, although I liked eating chocolate very much, my mother thought it was unhealthy and limited how much I could eat when I was a kid.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，如“people a lot of people”和“make our happy and relax”。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意语法正确。

例: I think chocolate is popular because it is delicious and sweet, so many people enjoy eating it. Also, chocolate can make us feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答表达较好，但有拼写错误“Strava”。建议注意拼写准确性，并可增加细节使回答更丰富。

例: Strawberry chocolate is my favorite because the first chocolate I ever had was strawberry-flavored. Every time I eat it, I recall my childhood memories.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“it can a lot of people like to eat chocolate”不通顺。建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并注意冠词和复数形式。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because many people like to eat it. Also, chocolates nowadays come in various beautiful shapes.

× I like eating chocolate because it is taste sweet and that can make me feel happy after I eating chocolate.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and that can make me feel happy after I eat chocolate.

这里“taste”应使用第三人称单数形式“tastes”，因为主语是单数“it”。另外，“after I eating chocolate”中“eating”应改为动词原形“eat”，因为“after”后面接的是完整的动作。

× For example, in my daily life I usually buy some chocolate cake or chocolate bread for snakes.

✓ For example, in my daily life I usually buy some chocolate cake or chocolate bread for snacks.

“snakes”是“蛇”的意思，语境中应为“snacks”（零食），这是拼写错误。

× although chocolate is delicious for me, it's I can't control myself to eat too much so I decided to eat twice a week.

✓ although chocolate is delicious to me, I can't control myself from eating too much so I decided to eat it twice a week.

“it's I can't”结构错误，应去掉“it's”。“delicious for me”应改为“delicious to me”。“control myself to eat”应改为“control myself from eating”，动词搭配错误。

× No, although I very like eating chocolate but my mother think that it is an unhealthy food so she limited me to eat so much when I was a kid.

✓ No, although I like eating chocolate very much, my mother thinks that it is unhealthy food so she limited me from eating too much when I was a kid.

“I very like”应改为“I like ... very much”，副词位置错误。“my mother think”应为“my mother thinks”，主谓一致错误。“an unhealthy food”应去掉冠词“an”，因为“food”是不可数名词。

× First, I think chocolate is delicious and sweet so people a lot of people like to eat that.

✓ First, I think chocolate is delicious and sweet so a lot of people like to eat it.

“people a lot of people”重复，应去掉多余部分。“eat that”应改为“eat it”，代词使用更自然。

× And 2nd, in my opinion, chocolate can make our happy and relax.

✓ And second, in my opinion, chocolate can make us happy and relaxed.

“our happy and relax”中“our”应为宾格“us”，“relax”应为形容词“relaxed”，表示状态。

× Strawberry chocolate is my favorite because my first chocolate in my life is Strava Strawberry chocolate.

✓ Strawberry chocolate is my favorite because my first chocolate in my life was Strava Strawberry chocolate.

“my first chocolate ... is”时态错误，应使用过去时“was”，因为指过去的经历。

× Yes, I think chocolate is the best choice to as a gift for others.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is the best choice as a gift for others.

“choice to as”结构错误，应去掉“to”，正确搭配是“choice as a gift”。

× First, it can a lot of people like to eat chocolate and 2nd, nowadays chocolate has been made into a variety shapes which look so beautiful.

✓ First, a lot of people like to eat chocolate and second, nowadays chocolate has been made into a variety of shapes which look very beautiful.

“it can a lot of people like”结构错误，应改为“a lot of people like”。“a variety shapes”应为“a variety of shapes”，缺少介词“of”。“so beautiful”改为“very beautiful”更合适。