Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clearer reason why chocolate lifts your mood.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and lifts my mood. In fact, it's my favorite treat that I enjoy every day.

提案: Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Be specific about frequency and use linking words to clarify your answer.

例: I eat chocolate quite frequently, especially in the mornings when I feel happy, because I find it very mouth-watering.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Provide a clear and concise answer with supporting details.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, which was nearly a decade ago. It was one of my favorite treats back then.

提案: Improve grammar and use linking words to connect ideas. Be more specific and avoid redundancy.

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it is delicious and can boost our mood. For example, people often eat chocolate to relieve stress and feel happier.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and provide a complete thought.

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is dark chocolate because I usually eat it when I feel stressed or depressed, and it quickly improves my mood.

提案: Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons.

例: Of course, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is popular worldwide and many people enjoy eating it. Therefore, gifting chocolate is a thoughtful idea.

× I'm very fond of eating chocolates and uh, it makes me feel happy and also lifts my mood and it is my favorite treat that I eat, uh, every day.

✓ I'm very fond of eating chocolate and uh, it makes me feel happy and also lifts my mood and it is my favorite treat that I eat, uh, every day.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but when referring to chocolate in general as a food, the uncountable noun 'chocolate' should be used. Using 'chocolate' here is more natural and grammatically correct.

× Quite frequently, but most recently I eat chocolate in this morning whenever I feel happy and it and I found it very mouth watering.

✓ Quite frequently, but most recently I ate chocolate this morning whenever I felt happy and I found it very mouth-watering.

The phrase 'most recently' and 'this morning' refer to a past time, so the past tense 'ate' and 'felt' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'feel'. Also, 'mouth watering' should be hyphenated as 'mouth-watering' when used as an adjective.

× As far as I remember, I quite frequently ate chocolate when I was a kid. When I was a kid, and I think it would be nearly a decade ago.

✓ As far as I remember, I quite frequently ate chocolate when I was a kid, and I think it was nearly a decade ago.

The phrase 'would be' is incorrect here because the time reference is definite and in the past. The correct past tense 'was' should be used. Also, the sentence structure is improved by combining the two sentences properly.

× According to my beliefs, chocolate is well known around the world because it's not only delicious but also it's boasts our our mood. When people feel stressed and depressed, they usually eat chocolate too quick change their moods.

✓ According to my beliefs, chocolate is well known around the world because it's not only delicious but also it boosts our mood. When people feel stressed and depressed, they usually eat chocolate to quickly change their moods.

The phrase 'it's boasts our our mood' is incorrect; 'it boosts our mood' is correct. Also, 'too quick change' should be 'to quickly change' to use the correct infinitive and adverb form. The repeated 'our' is a typo and should be removed.

× When it comes to my favorite chocolate flavor, it would be a dark chocolate because, uh, when I feel stress and depressed, I usually eat this, uh, flavored chocolate and it's quickly change my mood and, uh, mind and.

✓ When it comes to my favorite chocolate flavor, it is dark chocolate because, uh, when I feel stressed and depressed, I usually eat this flavored chocolate and it quickly changes my mood and mind.

The phrase 'it would be' should be 'it is' to express a general truth. 'Feel stress and depressed' should be 'feel stressed and depressed' to use correct adjective forms. 'It's quickly change' is incorrect; it should be 'it quickly changes' to agree with the singular subject and correct verb form.

× Of course, uh, I guess it would be a great, uh, gifts for uh, everyone because chocolate are well known around the world and also people love to eat this and therefore I think it is great way to gift someone a chocolate.

✓ Of course, uh, I guess it would be a great gift for uh, everyone because chocolate is well known around the world and also people love to eat it and therefore I think it is a great way to gift someone chocolate.

'Gifts' should be singular 'gift' to agree with 'a great'. 'Chocolate are' is incorrect; 'chocolate is' is correct because 'chocolate' is uncountable. 'Eat this' should be 'eat it' to refer correctly to chocolate. Also, 'a great way' needs the article 'a' before 'great way'. The phrase 'gift someone a chocolate' is better as 'gift someone chocolate' since 'chocolate' is uncountable here.