Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ не совсем ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует избегать лишних слов и выражать мысли более чётко и логично. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. However, currently I cannot eat it due to a health condition, as advised by my doctor.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и не полностью логичен. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова и более чётко выражать мысли, избегая повторов.

例: I usually eat chocolate a few times a week because it lifts my mood. Also, I often buy chocolate for my parents since they really like it.

提案: Ответ слишком общий и содержит лишние слова. Следует использовать более точные выражения и избегать тавтологии.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I thought it was the best treat, and my parents frequently bought it for me.

提案: Ответ неструктурирован и содержит грамматические ошибки. Нужно использовать связующие слова и более конкретные причины популярности шоколада.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes great and can be enjoyed in many forms, like with nuts or as bars. Additionally, some chocolates have health benefits that make people feel better.

提案: Ответ содержит неуверенные выражения и грамматические ошибки. Следует говорить более уверенно и структурировано, избегая лишних слов.

例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because I find dark chocolate too bitter. I also don't like white chocolate since it's not popular or easy to find in my country.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Рекомендуется использовать более правильную грамматику и чётко выражать мысли.

例: I think chocolate can be a good gift if the person likes it. However, it is not suitable for someone who is allergic to chocolate, as they might not appreciate it.

× But I cannot eat it now because I have a difficult disease and my doctor said that I don't, but I need to know.

✓ But I cannot eat it now because I have a difficult disease and my doctor said that I shouldn't, but I need to know.

The modal verb 'don't' is incorrect here; the correct modal verb is 'shouldn't' to express prohibition or advice. 'Don't' is a negative auxiliary verb, not a modal verb in this context.

× Also my parents really like chocolate and I usually do to buy chocolate for them.

✓ Also my parents really like chocolate and I usually buy chocolate for them.

The phrase 'I usually do to buy' is incorrect; 'do' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure. The correct form is 'I usually buy' to express habitual action.

× In my opinion, yes. I often ate chocolate whenever I could because I thought that it's the best food and meal and my parents often bought it for me so.

✓ In my opinion, yes. I often ate chocolate whenever I could because I thought that it was the best food and meal and my parents often bought it for me.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'It's' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency when referring to past thoughts.

× Also you can. Eat chocolate with nuts or bars.

✓ Also, you can eat chocolate with nuts or bars.

The sentence is fragmented incorrectly with a period after 'can'. It should be one continuous sentence for clarity and correct structure.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because uh, the dark chocolate in my opinion is really bitter and I don't like it at all, and white chocolate I don't like because it's not very popular in my country and you can find in the shops.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because, in my opinion, dark chocolate is really bitter and I don't like it at all, and I don't like white chocolate because it's not very popular in my country and you can't find it in the shops.

The sentence lacks proper pronouns and auxiliary verbs in some parts, such as 'you can find' should be 'you can't find it' to express negation, and 'white chocolate I don't like' should be 'I don't like white chocolate' for correct word order.

× In my opinion a chocolate can be good as a gift if you if person who will get it very like it.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate can be a good gift if the person who will get it really likes it.

The modal verb 'can be' is correct, but the sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles. 'If you if person who will get it very like it' is ungrammatical; it should be 'if the person who will get it really likes it'.

× But if person is allergic for it, he don't understand why he gets it.

✓ But if the person is allergic to it, he doesn't understand why he gets it.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'person', uses incorrect preposition 'for' instead of 'to', and has subject-verb agreement error with 'he don't' instead of 'he doesn't'.