Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. State your preference clearly, give a specific reason, and avoid hesitations/repetitions. Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting sentence with a specific detail (e.g., sweetness level or effect on you).

例: I don't like eating chocolate because I find it too sweet for my taste. For example, very sweet chocolate gives me a headache, so I usually avoid it.

提案: Give a clear frequency with simple, grammatical structure. Use linking words if you add clarification (e.g., "because"). Avoid filler words. If unsure, estimate and justify that estimate briefly.

例: I eat chocolate about three times a month because I only have it on special occasions like birthdays or when I visit friends.

提案: Answer directly and provide a specific contrast between past and present. Use past tense for childhood and present tense for now. Keep it to two sentences and remove fillers.

例: Yes, I ate chocolate often as a child because my parents gave it to me as a treat. Now that I'm older I rarely eat it because I prefer less sugary snacks.

提案: Give a clear reason and support it with a short explanation or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" correctly, and avoid self-referential slips ("me makes them").

例: I think chocolate is popular because it tastes sweet and many people associate it with comfort. For example, people often give chocolate as a treat during celebrations, which reinforces its popularity.

提案: State your favourite clearly and explain why with a specific comparison. Use correct adjectives (sweet, bitter) and a short example to illustrate your preference. Keep to two sentences.

例: My favourite is milk chocolate because it's creamy and not as bitter as dark chocolate. For example, dark chocolate tastes too strong for me, while milk chocolate is milder and more pleasant.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief reason or example why chocolate works as a gift. Use one topic sentence and one supporting sentence with a specific context (e.g., occasions or recipients).

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because most people enjoy sweet treats and it suits many occasions. For instance, giving a box of chocolates on Valentine's Day or as a thank-you is usually well received.

× Umm, I don't like eating chocolate because I I'm, I don't like eating some very sweet tea.

✓ Umm, I don't like eating chocolate because I'm not fond of very sweet things.

The original sentence has redundant pronouns and fragments ('I I'm, I') and an incorrect noun 'tea' instead of 'things'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Use a single subject pronoun 'I' with the contraction 'I'm' and replace 'some very sweet tea' with a clearer noun 'very sweet things'. Suggestion: produce one clear clause without repeated pronouns.

× I don't know but I think I I eating chocolate. Umm. Three a month because I don't like usually eat chocolate.

✓ I don't know, but I think I eat chocolate about three times a month because I don't usually like eating chocolate.

The speaker incorrectly uses the present participle 'eating' without an auxiliary ('I eating') and repeats pronouns. Also word order for 'usually' is wrong. This meets 'Verb in the present participle form' error: use the simple present 'I eat' for habits, place frequency adverb 'usually' before the main verb or after auxiliary. Suggestion: use 'I eat' and 'usually' before 'like' or 'don't usually like' and combine fragments into one sentence.

× Yes, when I was a kid I opened chocolate, but I'm growing up now. Umm, I don't like chocolate. And then before.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I used to eat chocolate, but as I grew up I stopped liking it.

'Opened chocolate' is wrong: speaker likely means habitual past action, so use 'used to eat' or simple past 'ate'. 'I'm growing up now' conflicts with past reference; use past 'grew up' or 'as I grew up'. This is a past tense issue: choose appropriate past forms for past habits and changes over time. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and 'stopped liking' to show change.

× Umm because many people think chocolate is very sweet and it makes me makes them happy when they are eating.

✓ Umm, because many people think chocolate is very sweet and it makes them happy when they are eating it.

Original has pronoun confusion 'it makes me makes them happy' mixing 'me' and 'them' and duplicate verbs. This is incorrect use of pronouns: use one appropriate pronoun ('them') to match 'many people', and add 'it' to refer to chocolate. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and remove duplicate verbs.

× I like milk chocolate because I don't like Berry SU sweet or very bitter.

✓ I like milk chocolate because I don't like very sweet or very bitter flavors.

'Berry SU sweet' appears to be nonsensical; likely meant 'very sweet'. The structure 'don't like very sweet or very bitter' should modify 'flavors', so add noun. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs: ensure correct adjective forms and include the noun they describe. Suggestion: use 'very sweet' and 'very bitter flavors'.

× For example, dark chocolate is taste very bitter so I like milk chocolate.

✓ For example, dark chocolate tastes very bitter, so I prefer milk chocolate.

'Is taste' is ungrammatical: use the verb 'tastes' (third person singular). Also 'I like milk chocolate' is acceptable but 'prefer' is more natural in contrast. This is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and verb form (third person singular). Suggestion: use 'tastes' and include a comma before the conjunction.

× Yes, all of the gift makes people so happy. Uh, overall chocolate is the same.

✓ Yes, all gifts make people very happy. Overall, chocolate does the same.

'All of the gift' is ungrammatical; should be plural 'all gifts' and match verb 'make'. This is a sentence structure and singular/plural issue. Also 'overall chocolate is the same' is vague; rephrase to 'chocolate does the same'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with plural verbs and clearer wording.