Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng (help -> helps), tránh dùng từ không cần thiết (productive không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi phát âm hoặc ngữ pháp nhỏ để tăng điểm. Bạn cũng nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel relaxed after a busy day. Moreover, I often go to karaoke with my friends three or four times a month, which makes it even more enjoyable.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'No, I have learned how to sing before' gây hiểu nhầm, nên dùng 'No, I have never learned to sing'. Ngoài ra, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because my dream is not related to music. Instead, I prefer to focus on other skills, such as chemistry and math, since I want to become a teacher.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, ví dụ 'my family is my girlfriend' gây nhầm lẫn. Bạn nên tách rõ ràng các đối tượng và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'makes' thay vì 'make' khi chủ ngữ là số nhiều.

例: I want to sing for my family and my girlfriend because they are very supportive and make me feel comfortable. With them, I can be myself without worrying about being judged.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa phù hợp, ví dụ 'it's help' nên là 'it helps', 'realize and productive' không rõ nghĩa trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên dùng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn với liên từ phù hợp.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them feel relaxed and refreshed after a long day at work. For example, many people feel more positive and less stressed when they listen to their favorite songs.

× Yeah, I really enjoy singing because it help me feel relaxed and productive.

✓ Yeah, I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel relaxed and productive.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement rule in English.

× I often go to karaoke with my friends about 3 or 4 * a month.

✓ I often go to karaoke with my friends about 3 or 4 times a month.

The quantifier '3 or 4' needs a unit of measurement. 'Times' is the correct quantifier to indicate frequency of events.

× No, I have learned how to sing before because my dream just is not related to music.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing before because my dream is not related to music.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'have learned' with 'just' and the phrase is awkward. 'Have never learned' correctly expresses the negative experience. Also, 'just is not' is incorrect word order; it should be 'is not'.

× I prefer to focus on other skill.

✓ I prefer to focus on other skills.

The noun 'skill' should be plural 'skills' because 'other' implies more than one.

× I want to be a teacher so I spend more time to studying about chemistries and math.

✓ I want to be a teacher so I spend more time studying chemistry and math.

The phrase 'spend more time to studying' is incorrect; it should be 'spend more time studying'. Also, 'chemistries' is incorrect; 'chemistry' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. The preposition 'about' is unnecessary here.

× I want to sing for my family is my girlfriend because they are very supportive and makes me feel comfortable.

✓ I want to sing for my family and my girlfriend because they are very supportive and make me feel comfortable.

The sentence incorrectly combines 'my family is my girlfriend' which is illogical. It should be 'my family and my girlfriend'. Also, 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject 'they'.

× Many things for them I can be myself with worrying about judgment.

✓ With them, I can be myself without worrying about judgment.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper word order and prepositions to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it's help them realize and productive after a long day at work.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them feel relaxed and productive after a long day at work.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'realize and productive' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relaxed and productive' to make sense.

× For example, many people feel more positive and less stressed when they think their favorite song.

✓ For example, many people feel more positive and less stressed when they listen to their favorite song.

The verb 'think' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'listen to' when referring to hearing a song.