Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有點重複且語法不夠自然。建議你直接回答問題，並用正確的時態和語法，避免冗言贅詞。可以用連接詞讓句子更流暢。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax. For example, I often sing while driving or taking a shower, which makes these activities more enjoyable.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤和用詞不當，建議注意主詞和動詞的一致性，並使用更自然的表達方式。可以用連接詞使句子更連貫。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I often watch online videos to improve my singing. These videos are helpful because they teach me how to control my voice and use diaphragmatic breathing.

提案: 回答中語法和用詞不夠準確，句子結構也較混亂。建議使用更清晰的句子結構，並避免重複。可以用連接詞使內容更有條理。

例: I usually sing for elderly people because singing can help them recall good memories. Moreover, it stimulates their minds by encouraging them to think about the tone and melody.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤和重複，語句不夠流暢。建議使用正確的時態和語法，並避免口語填充詞。用連接詞讓句子更連貫。

例: Definitely yes. When I sing, I feel more relaxed and less stressed. Also, singing can make many people happier because they enjoy the music and the positive atmosphere it creates.

× Umm I always singing during driving a car or when I take taking a shower so I really like to singing.

✓ Umm I am always singing while driving a car or when I take a shower, so I really like singing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'always singing' without an auxiliary verb and mixes verb forms like 'take taking'. The correct form is the present continuous 'I am always singing' and the gerund 'singing' after 'like'. Also, 'during driving' should be 'while driving'. In English (Taiwan): 動詞進行式需要助動詞，像是'I am always singing'，而不是直接用動詞ing形式。'take taking'是重複錯誤，應該只用'take a shower'。'like to singing'應改為'like singing'。

× I find those video are useful because they teach us how to improve my voice and how to use the belly to sound the voice.

✓ I find those videos are useful because they teach us how to improve my voice and how to use the belly to produce sound.

The word 'video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'those'. Also, 'sound the voice' is awkward; 'produce sound' is more natural. In English (Taiwan): 'video'要和'dthose'搭配用複數形式'videos'。'sound the voice'不自然，改用'produce sound'較好。

× I find those video are useful because they teach us how to improve my voice and how to use the belly to sound the voice.

✓ I find those videos are useful because they teach us how to improve our voice and how to use the belly to produce sound.

The pronouns 'us' and 'my' are inconsistent. It should be consistent, either 'us' and 'our' or 'me' and 'my'. Here, 'us' and 'our' fit better. In English (Taiwan): 'us'和'my'混用不正確，應該保持一致，像是'us'和'our'。

× I find those video are useful because they teach us how to improve my voice and how to use the belly to sound the voice.

✓ I find those videos are useful because they teach us how to improve our voice and how to use the belly to produce sound.

The noun 'video' should be plural 'videos' to agree with 'those'. In English (Taiwan): 'those'後面要接複數名詞，所以用'videos'。

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

No grammatical error in this sentence; no correction needed.

× I usually sing for elder people 'cause we know that singing could help them to have some good memorize it and also have the good connection with their old memories.

✓ I usually sing for elderly people because we know that singing could help them have good memories and also maintain a good connection with their old memories.

'Elder people' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'elderly people'. 'Some good memorize it' is incorrect; it should be 'good memories'. Also, 'have the good connection' should be 'maintain a good connection'. In English (Taiwan): 'elder people'應改為'elderly people'，'memorize'是動詞，這裡要用名詞'memories'。'have the good connection'改為'maintain a good connection'較自然。

× And also we can help them keep thinking about the tone and the melody.

✓ We can also help them keep thinking about the tone and the melody.

Starting a sentence with 'And also' is informal and redundant. It's better to say 'We can also help...'. In English (Taiwan): 句首用'And also'不正式且多餘，改用'We can also'較好。

× Definitely yes uh, when I was singing the song I feel that I feel more relaxed and stressless and also umm singing a song can makes a lot of people feel happy then before 'cause like they will enjoy the music and enjoy the vibe with it.

✓ Definitely yes, uh, when I sing a song I feel more relaxed and less stressed, and also singing a song can make a lot of people feel happier than before because they enjoy the music and the vibe.

'When I was singing' should be 'when I sing' to match the present tense context. 'Stressless' is not a common adjective; 'less stressed' is better. 'Can makes' should be 'can make' because modal verbs are followed by base verbs. 'Happy then before' should be 'happier than before'. In English (Taiwan): 'when I was singing'改為'when I sing'符合現在時。'stressless'不常用，改成'less stressed'。'can makes'錯誤，助動詞後接原形動詞'make'。'then before'應為'than before'。