Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear in parts. Try to avoid redundancy and be more precise. For example, instead of saying "that kind of patience, that kind of calmness," you could say "singing helps me feel calm and patient." Also, avoid incomplete phrases like "I love singing in sort." Keep your sentences complete and natural.

例: Yes, I like singing because it is my hobby. Singing helps me feel calm and patient, and I enjoy expressing my emotions through music.

提案: Your answer is relevant but ends abruptly and could be more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid uncertain phrases like "which I think." Instead, be confident in your statements. Try to add a concluding sentence to complete your answer.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing during my music class. I found myself quite skilled at it and enjoyed practicing different songs. Learning to sing helped me understand musical notes and improve my vocal control, which has boosted my confidence.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like "it's easy as there are many kinds of words." Instead, explain why you like singing for your mom with specific reasons. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I want to sing for my mom because she always supports me. Singing for her makes me feel comfortable and happy, and I enjoy expressing my love through songs.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks specific supporting details. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and provide reasons or examples to support your opinion. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music lifts their mood. For example, when people sing their favourite songs, they often feel joyful and relaxed.

× Singing is my hobby, but not kind of job.

✓ Singing is my hobby, but not a kind of job.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'kind of job'. In English, when using 'kind of' followed by a singular countable noun, it requires an article such as 'a'. So, it should be 'a kind of job'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Singing gives me that kind of patience, that kind of calmness.

✓ Singing gives me a kind of patience, a kind of calmness.

The phrase 'that kind of' is used incorrectly here. When expressing an unspecified type or degree, 'a kind of' is appropriate. Using 'that kind of' implies a specific known type, which is not the intended meaning. Therefore, 'a kind of patience' and 'a kind of calmness' are correct.

× I love singing in sort.

✓ I love singing, in short.

The phrase 'in sort' is incorrect and likely a mistaken form of 'in short', which means 'to summarize' or 'briefly'. The correct phrase is 'in short'. Also, a comma is needed before 'in short' to separate it from the main clause.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing during my music class.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing during my music class.

The use of present perfect 'have learned' is less appropriate with a specific past time reference 'during my music class'. The simple past tense 'learned' is correct here because the action happened at a definite time in the past.

× I found myself quite skilled at it and enjoying practicing different songs.

✓ I found myself quite skilled at it and enjoyed practicing different songs.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past tense 'found' with present participle 'enjoying'. To maintain tense consistency, 'enjoyed' (simple past) should be used to match 'found'. Also, 'enjoying' without an auxiliary verb is incorrect here.

× Learning to sing helped me understand musical notes and improve my vocal control, which I think.

✓ Learning to sing helped me understand musical notes and improve my vocal control, I think.

The phrase 'which I think' is incomplete and awkward. It should be 'I think' to express the speaker's opinion clearly. Alternatively, the sentence could be restructured, but keeping 'I think' at the end is simpler and correct.

× If you ask so I will be singing for my mom because it's easy as there are many kinds of words and it makes comfortable and I love to sing for my mom.

✓ If you ask, I will sing for my mom because it's easy, there are many kinds of words, it makes me comfortable, and I love to sing for my mom.

The original sentence has multiple issues: missing commas, awkward phrasing, and unclear expressions. 'If you ask so' is incorrect; it should be 'If you ask'. 'I will be singing' is less appropriate here than simple future 'I will sing'. 'It makes comfortable' lacks an object; it should be 'it makes me comfortable'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs commas to separate ideas.

× Most of the people like songs, so everybody loves singing.

✓ Most people like songs, so everybody loves singing.

The phrase 'most of the people' is less natural here; 'most people' is preferred when speaking generally. Removing 'of the' makes the sentence more fluent and grammatically correct.

× In my personal opinion, most of the people like singing because it is nice.

✓ In my personal opinion, most people like singing because it is nice.

Similar to the previous correction, 'most of the people' should be 'most people' when referring to people in general. This is a common quantifier usage in English.