Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，句子结构混乱，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，直接表达喜欢唱歌但不擅长，避免无关细节。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax, although I'm not very good at it.

提案: 语法错误较多，时态和单复数使用不准确。建议注意时态一致，句子结构完整。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in elementary school because we had to sing in the choir together.

提案: 表达不够流畅，词汇使用不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意词汇搭配。

例: I want to sing a song for my parents to thank them for raising me and supporting my education.

提案: 句子结构复杂且不连贯，表达不够清晰。建议分句表达，使用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness. Many people enjoy listening to music, but fewer have the confidence to sing. Those who do often express their feelings, such as happiness or sadness, through singing.

× I really when every people singing the song I just sit in the corner and drink beer and eat snacks.

✓ I really, when every person is singing the song, I just sit in the corner and drink beer and eat snacks.

“every people”是错误的表达，应该用“every person”表示“每个人”，因为“every”后面用单数名词。

× I really when every people singing the song I just sit in the corner and drink beer and eat snacks.

✓ I really, when every person is singing the song, I just sit in the corner and drink beer and eat snacks.

“every people singing”缺少助动词，应改为“every person is singing”，动词用现在进行时。

× I have learned how to sing when I was pupil at elementary school.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was a pupil at elementary school.

“have learned”与“when I was”时间状语不匹配，应该用一般过去时“learned”。

× Everybody need to sing a choir together.

✓ Everybody needs to sing in a choir together.

“Everybody”是单数，谓语动词应加-s，变为“needs”。

× Everybody need to sing a choir together.

✓ Everybody needs to sing in a choir together.

“sing a choir”用法错误，正确搭配是“sing in a choir”。

× I want to sing a song to my parents, to thanks to them nourishing me and be patient to me for my grow up and education.

✓ I want to sing a song to my parents to thank them for nourishing me and being patient with me during my growth and education.

“to thanks to them”应为“to thank them”，“be patient to me”应为“being patient with me”，“grow up”应为“growth”，并且句子结构需要调整。

× Yes, I believe most of people enjoy music and listen to music but don't have too many people have confidence to sing a song.

✓ Yes, I believe most people enjoy music and listen to music but not many people have confidence to sing a song.

“most of people”应为“most people”，“don't have too many people have confidence”结构混乱，应改为“not many people have confidence”。

× Yes, I believe most of people enjoy music and listen to music but don't have too many people have confidence to sing a song.

✓ Yes, I believe most people enjoy music and listen to music but not many people have confidence to sing a song.

“too many people have confidence”用法错误，应使用“not many people have confidence”表达否定含义。

× So some few people like singing a song to express their personal feeling like happiness and sadness.

✓ So a few people like singing songs to express their personal feelings like happiness and sadness.

“some few people”不正确，应为“a few people”；“singing a song”改为“singing songs”；“feeling”应为复数“feelings”。