Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تكون إجاباتك أكثر تنظيمًا وطبيعية، وتجنب التكرار والكلمات غير الضرورية مثل "umm". استعمل جمل واضحة ومترابطة مع تفاصيل محددة تدعم رأيك.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions creatively. I especially like classic songs, which I often sing when I want to relax or lift my mood. Singing brings me happiness and sometimes inspires me to feel more positive.

提案: حاول استخدام جمل كاملة وواضحة، وابتعد عن التعبيرات الغامضة مثل "social media things". أضف تفاصيل أكثر عن تجربتك لتحسين الإجابة.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I watch videos of singers on social media and try to imitate their techniques. Over time, I have noticed some improvement in my singing skills.

提案: تجنب التردد والكلمات الزائدة مثل "umm" و"uh". نظم إجابتك بشكل واضح وقدم تفاصيل محددة عن سبب رغبتك في الغناء لهم.

例: I would like to sing for my family, including my parents and siblings, to show them my love and appreciation. Singing for them helps me express my feelings and strengthen our bond.

提案: حاول أن تكون أكثر وضوحًا ودقة في التعبير، وتجنب التكرار والكلمات غير الضرورية. استخدم عبارات مترابطة ومنطقية لتوضيح فكرتك.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions freely. It can uplift moods, reduce stress, and create a sense of excitement and joy.

× I would like to sing 'cause it gives me happiness and it's inspired me sometimes.

✓ I would like to sing 'cause it gives me happiness and it has inspired me sometimes.

The phrase 'it's inspired me' is incorrect because 'inspired' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary verb 'has' to form the present perfect tense. The correct form is 'it has inspired me' to indicate an action that happened at an unspecified time before now.

× No, I don't, but I only watch people on social media things, so I try to copy them and I'm improving over the time.

✓ No, I don't, but I only watch people on social media, so I try to copy them and I'm improving over time.

The phrase 'on social media things' is awkward and incorrect; 'social media' alone suffices. Also, 'over the time' should be 'over time' to correctly express gradual improvement.

× Umm, I would like to sing for my parents, uh, whether it's my mom or my siblings or my dad, I would like to sing them uh, lovely and umm, show them how much I love them and express my emotions in these songs.

✓ Umm, I would like to sing for my parents, uh, whether it's my mom or my siblings or my dad, I would like to sing to them, uh, lovely songs and, umm, show them how much I love them and express my emotions in these songs.

The verb 'sing' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating the audience. Also, 'lovely' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify; adding 'songs' corrects the sentence.

× Of course, 'cause as I said, uh, it's a type of arts that express your emotions, umm, and it can bring happiness, umm, determined sometimes and uh, make you feel excitement.

✓ Of course, 'cause as I said, uh, it's a type of art that expresses your emotions, umm, and it can bring happiness, umm, determination sometimes and, uh, make you feel excitement.

'Arts' should be singular 'art' because 'a type of' is singular. The verb 'express' should be 'expresses' to agree with the singular subject. Also, 'determined' is incorrect here; the noun 'determination' fits the context.