Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and reflect my interests through music. I often listen to my favorite songs to practice and improve.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ phù hợp. Hãy sắp xếp câu theo trình tự logic để người nghe dễ hiểu.

例: When I was a child, I took singing lessons for several years. It was an unforgettable experience, although I haven't practiced much recently because I try to avoid feeling nervous.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể tự nhiên hơn bằng cách sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và liên kết các ý với nhau.

例: I like to sing for my family and close friends because they are very supportive. Their appreciation motivates me to perform better and enjoy singing even more.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác và lặp lại, đồng thời sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing can improve people's mood. For example, listening to funny songs can help you feel refreshed and full of energy when you are feeling down.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it can express my emotion and I can it can reflect my hobbies throughout the music.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it can express my emotions and it can reflect my hobbies through music.

The phrase 'I can it can' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'it can'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. 'Throughout the music' is better expressed as 'through music' for natural usage.

× I often listen my love music.

✓ I often listen to my favorite music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'my love music' is incorrect; it should be 'my favorite music' or 'the music I love'.

× When I was a child, I had sung a in a several years.

✓ When I was a child, I sang for several years.

The past perfect 'had sung' is unnecessary here; simple past 'sang' is appropriate. The phrase 'a in a several years' is incorrect; it should be 'for several years'.

× I think it was a unforgettable memorized, although I don't I didn't use it too much and I also try to avoid feeling.

✓ I think it was an unforgettable memory, although I didn't use it much and I also tried to avoid the feeling.

'Unforgettable' precedes a noun, so 'memory' is correct, not 'memorized' (which is a verb form). 'A' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Don't I didn't' is incorrect; only 'didn't' is needed. 'Try' should be past tense 'tried' to match past context.

× A good idea to sing for my family and close friends.

✓ It is a good idea to sing for my family and close friends.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'It is' is needed to form a complete sentence.

× But yes, I think singing can improve your emotions if, uh, if you bad and you can listen, uh, funny song, it's gonna help you feel refresh, uh, full of full of energies.

✓ Yes, I think singing can improve your emotions. If you feel bad and listen to a funny song, it will help you feel refreshed and full of energy.

'If you bad' is missing the verb 'feel'. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' before 'a funny song'. 'Feel refresh' should be 'feel refreshed'. 'Full of full of energies' is redundant and incorrect; 'full of energy' is correct.