Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and hesitations that affect fluency. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incorrect phrases such as 'despite of your'. Also, keep your answer concise and clear, focusing on natural expressions.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel free and relaxed. Regardless of my singing talent or voice, singing calms my soul and makes me happy.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb tenses and singular/plural forms. Also, try to connect your ideas smoothly with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have some experience. At the beginning of my classes, the school choir leader selected me as a choir member. However, I think it was a mistake because many people who know me believe I have no talent.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains unclear phrases like 'singing here sing hearing'. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating the same point. Use simple and correct vocabulary to explain your feelings.

例: I prefer to sing only for myself because I don't have a good singing voice. I feel more comfortable enjoying singing alone rather than performing for others.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but the phrasing is awkward and repetitive, such as 'emptying your emptying emotions'. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions to explain your thoughts.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people release built-up energy and emotions, allowing them to feel more peaceful and joyful.

× Uh, despite of your, uh, singing talents, uh, or your despite of your voice, uh, seeing helps you to, uh, calm your soul.

✓ Uh, despite your singing talents or your voice, singing helps you to calm your soul.

The phrase 'despite of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'despite' without 'of'. Using 'despite' alone is the proper form to express contrast.

× all people who knows me

✓ all people who know me

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people', which is plural, so the verb should be 'know' instead of 'knows' to agree in number.

× I cannot sing for another people

✓ I cannot sing for other people

The word 'another' is used with singular countable nouns; for plural nouns like 'people', 'other' is the correct determiner.

× I don't have singing here sing hearing

✓ I don't have a good ear for singing

The original phrase is unclear and incorrect. The intended meaning is likely about lacking the ability to hear or judge singing well, so 'a good ear for singing' is the correct expression.

× I don't have proper voice to sing well

✓ I don't have a proper voice to sing well

The noun 'voice' is countable here and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× it helps you to release accumulated energy and emptying your emptying emotions and feel another more pure emotions

✓ it helps you to release accumulated energy, empty your emotions, and feel purer emotions

The verb 'empty' should be in base form after 'helps you to'; 'emptying' is incorrect here. Also, 'another more pure emotions' is incorrect; 'purer emotions' is the correct comparative form without 'another'.