Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为简单，语言表达不够自然，且有语法错误，如“saying a single song”应为“singing a song”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and forget about my work or studies. When I sing, I can focus entirely on the song, which makes me feel peaceful.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“scene class”应为“singing class”，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的词汇和时态。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. Instead, I watch YouTube videos of singers and try to imitate their style and techniques.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“accompany with my grandma”应为“spend time with my grandma”，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

例: I would like to sing for my grandma because I don't have much time to spend with her due to my busy work and studies. Singing for her would be a way to thank her for her support over the years.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但用词不够准确，如“happiness feeling”应为“feelings of happiness”。建议使用更自然的表达和连接词，使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because the lyrics and melodies can express feelings of joy or gratitude, which can make listeners feel happy.

× I just have to concentrate on saying a single song.

✓ I just have to concentrate on singing a single song.

动词concentrate后应接动名词形式，不能用动词的现在分词形式。这里应该用singing而不是saying。

× No, I did not go to a particular scene class to learn how to sing.

✓ No, I did not go to a particular singing class to learn how to sing.

这里的scene class应为singing class，属于词汇错误，不属于语法错误，故不改。动词时态正确。

× I just watched the YouTube videos online on a singer how to sing it.

✓ I just watched YouTube videos online about how a singer sings.

介词on用法错误，应该用about来引出内容。

× Then I try to copy it and try to sing the way she or he sing it.

✓ Then I try to copy it and try to sing the way she or he sings it.

主语she或he为第三人称单数，谓语动词应加s。

× I want to sing for my grandma because I do not have much time to accompany with my grandma because I have a lot of work and study.

✓ I want to sing for my grandma because I do not have much time to accompany my grandma as I have a lot of work and study.

动词accompany后不需要介词with，直接跟宾语。

× So if I have the chance to sing it for someone, it would be my grandma to thank you for her accompany for over the 18 years and always.

✓ So if I have the chance to sing for someone, it would be my grandma to thank her for accompanying me for over 18 years and always.

代词使用错误，应该用her指代grandma；accompany应使用动名词形式accompanying；句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。

× Yes, I think so because the lyrics and the melodies of a song can express their happiness feeling or the gratitude feeling to someone which can bring happiness to people listening to it.

✓ Yes, I think so because the lyrics and the melodies of a song can express happiness or gratitude to someone, which can bring happiness to the people listening to it.

代词their使用不当，歌词和旋律不具备人的属性，故用抽象名词表达情感；句子结构调整使表达更自然。