Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lỗi phát âm (ví dụ: 'jab' thay vì 'stress' hoặc 'tension'). Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không chính xác và giảm việc sử dụng từ ngữ lặp lại như 'uh'. Hãy cố gắng nói rõ ràng, tự nhiên và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing my favorite songs because it helps me relax and boosts my energy.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các từ như 'uh'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing professionally. I just sing for fun because it's one of my favorite hobbies.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá dài và có nhiều từ ngữ thừa, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và chú ý ngữ pháp.

例: I usually sing for myself because I enjoy listening to my own voice, especially when I'm alone.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ ngữ không chính xác như 'phase two'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý kiến của bạn.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because when I face many challenges, singing my favorite songs helps me feel relaxed and motivated to work harder.

× I really like singing my favorite song and I think, uh, doing that activities help me to, uh, reduce jab and, uh, gain more energy.

✓ I really like singing my favorite song and I think, uh, doing those activities helps me to, uh, reduce stress and, uh, gain more energy.

The word 'activities' is plural, so the demonstrative pronoun should be 'those' instead of 'that'. Also, 'activities' is plural, so the verb should be 'helps' changed to 'help' to agree with plural subject. However, since 'doing those activities' is singular (gerund phrase), the verb should be 'helps'. The original sentence used 'help' which is incorrect. Also, 'jab' seems to be a typo and should be 'stress'. Suggestions: Use 'those' for plural nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement with gerund phrases.

× No, I haven't Uh, I just sing by my ability and I think it just, uh, it just my favorite, uh, hobbies.

✓ No, I haven't. Uh, I just sing by my ability and I think it is just, uh, my favorite, uh, hobby.

The phrase 'it just my favorite, uh, hobbies' is missing the verb 'is' and 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' because 'it' refers to a singular subject. Suggestions: Include the verb 'is' and match singular/plural forms appropriately.

× So that uh, it just for fun.

✓ So that, uh, it is just for fun.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct. Suggestions: Always include the verb in sentences to complete the predicate.

× I think I just wanna sing for myself because, uh, when I am alone I usually sing, but when I go to the crowded places, I'm not really afraid of uh, making some noise, so uh, just myself like to hear my voice.

✓ I think I just wanna sing for myself because, uh, when I am alone I usually sing, but when I go to crowded places, I'm not really afraid of, uh, making some noise, so, uh, I just like to hear my own voice.

The phrase 'just myself like to hear my voice' is incorrect. It should be 'I just like to hear my own voice' to use the correct subject and possessive pronoun. Also, 'the crowded places' should be 'crowded places' without 'the'. Suggestions: Use correct subject pronouns and possessive adjectives, and omit unnecessary articles.

× Yes, I do think so because when I have to phase two, a lot of challenges, I usually spend a little time to, uh, sing my favorite songs and after that, uh, I can feel more comfortable and uh, can work hard for.

✓ Yes, I do think so because when I face a lot of challenges, I usually spend a little time, uh, singing my favorite songs and after that, uh, I feel more comfortable and can work harder.

The phrase 'have to phase two, a lot of challenges' is incorrect; it should be 'face a lot of challenges'. Also, 'spend a little time to sing' should be 'spend a little time singing' (verb + -ing form). The ending 'can work hard for' is incomplete; it should be 'can work harder'. Suggestions: Use correct verbs ('face'), use gerund after 'spend time', and complete comparative forms properly.