Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "Singing also allow me" and "I usually go to get it with my friends." To improve, focus on correct subject-verb agreement and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress after a long day at work. Moreover, singing allows me to express my emotions, especially to the people I care about. I often sing with my friends, which helps us share our feelings and have a good time together.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words like "UMM" and confusing phrases such as "in the fall, more UMM training." To improve, provide a clear and direct response, avoid fillers, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will enhance clarity.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, when I was younger, my dad used to sing a lot at home, and I learned many songs from him. Because of that, I feel comfortable singing in front of others.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and completing your last sentence for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid abrupt endings. Also, try to be more specific about what you are preparing.

例: I would love to sing for my partner because singing allows me to express my deepest emotions and create a special connection between us. For example, when I sing a love song, I can make him feel truly loved. Actually, I am currently preparing a song to perform for him soon.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words like "umm" and some awkward phrasing such as "release our pressure on everything." To improve, avoid fillers, use more precise vocabulary, and connect your ideas with linking words for better coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to express our emotions and relieve stress. Therefore, singing is an effective way for people to feel happier and more relaxed.

× Singing also allow me to express my emotions, especially to the people I care about.

✓ Singing also allows me to express my emotions, especially to the people I care about.

The subject 'Singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'allows' to agree in number. Using 'allow' is incorrect because it is the base form used with plural subjects.

× I usually go to get it with my friends and we can share our feelings and have a good time together.

✓ I usually go to karaoke with my friends and we can share our feelings and have a good time together.

The phrase 'go to get it' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'go to karaoke' or a similar activity. Using the correct prepositional phrase clarifies the meaning.

× No, I've never learned how to sing in the fall, more UMM training.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing formally, more like informal training.

The phrase 'in the fall, more UMM training' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It seems the speaker meant they never had formal training but some informal practice. Correcting the sentence clarifies the meaning and fixes tense and structure issues.

× So that's why I can sing UMM comfortably in front of people.

✓ So that's why I can sing comfortably in front of people.

The word 'UMM' is an interjection and should not be part of the sentence structure. Removing it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I would love to sing for my lover because singing allows me to express my deepest emotion and actually create a special connection between us.

✓ I would love to sing for my lover because singing allows me to express my deepest emotions and actually create a special connection between us.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to multiple feelings. Using the plural form is correct when talking about a range of feelings.

× And actually, I'm currently preparing.

✓ And actually, I'm currently preparing a song.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object. Adding 'a song' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Yeah, I do think singing can bring happiness to people because like I say, umm, singing can express our emotion and also can release our pressure on everything.

✓ Yeah, I do think singing can bring happiness to people because, like I said, singing can express our emotions and also can relieve our pressure about everything.

The phrase 'like I say' should be 'like I said' to match past reference. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to indicate multiple feelings. 'Release our pressure' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve our pressure' meaning to reduce stress.