Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，表达重复且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially in the bathroom because the acoustics make my voice sound better. I also like singing with a microphone sometimes.

提案: 语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句型，简洁明了地表达自己的想法。

例: I haven't learned how to sing because I am focusing on piano lessons. Since I'm not very good at piano yet, I want to practice it more before trying something new.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，语法和词汇使用不当。建议明确表达想为谁唱歌，并用连贯的句子说明原因。

例: I would like to sing with Lolita, a famous Hong Kong artist. It is my dream to perform on stage with her someday.

提案: 表达不够连贯，语法错误较多。建议使用更准确的表达，增加逻辑连接词，使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When someone sings well, it can lift everyone's mood. For example, when I play piano for my friend, it makes him very happy.

× Yes, I like to sing especially in the bathroom because I personally think in the bathroom saying it's better.

✓ Yes, I like to sing especially in the bathroom because I personally think singing in the bathroom is better.

这里'saying'用错了，应该用动名词'singing'表示动作。动词后面接动名词表示喜欢做某事。

× I don't really wanted to learn how to sing because I have a piano class so I don't want to learn a new things because life because the piano I'm not that good so I don't want to try new thing just keep practicing piano.

✓ I don't really want to learn how to sing because I have a piano class, so I don't want to learn new things because I'm not that good at piano, so I just want to keep practicing piano.

'wanted'时态错误，应为一般现在时'want'；'a new things'中things是复数，不应加冠词'a'；'new thing'应为复数形式。句子结构也需调整使其更通顺。

× So I personally like to sing with Lolita. It's a Hong Kong artist. So that's my wish lead and I very wanted to get her sign.

✓ So I personally like to sing with Lolita. She's a Hong Kong artist. So that's my wish, and I really want to get her signature.

'It's a Hong Kong artist'中'It'指代不当，应为'She'指人；'wish lead'应为'wish'；'very wanted'时态和副词用法错误，应为'really want'；'get her sign'应为'get her signature'。

× I very wanted to get her sign.

✓ I really want to get her signature.

'wanted'为过去式，但句意表达现在愿望，应使用一般现在时'want'。

× This is my dream. I always wanted to go to the the singing part.

✓ This is my dream. I have always wanted to go to a singing party.

'always wanted'时态应为现在完成时'have always wanted'；'the the'重复；'singing part'应为'singing party'。

× Yes, I personally think if you sing so much, I think it's bringing happiness to people because if you have a great quality with your mouth, the song is going to be very good.

✓ Yes, I personally think if you sing well, it brings happiness to people because if you have a good voice, the song is going to be very good.

'sing so much'用法不当，应该用副词'sing well'；'great quality with your mouth'表达不清，应改为'good voice'。

× So it's make me happy too.

✓ So it makes me happy too.

主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，'make'应为'makes'。

× Like my friend, he wants to play the piano and I play and he very happy.

✓ For example, my friend wants to play the piano, and when I play, he is very happy.

句子缺少连词和谓语，'he very happy'缺少动词'is'，需要调整句子结构使其完整通顺。