Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like singing.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. For example, I often sing in the car while listening to music, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is brief and lacks detail. Try to provide a clear topic sentence and expand with specific details or experiences. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I started singing as a child when my dad bought me a Bluetooth speaker. I used to play music and sing along, which helped me develop my interest in singing.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to answer directly and provide specific reasons. Use linking words to make your response coherent and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I prefer to sing in the car because it helps me relax. Also, listening to music and singing along has developed my interest in music over time.

提案: Your answer is vague and confusing. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid unrelated or unclear statements.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and feel joyful. For instance, singing with friends often creates a fun and positive atmosphere.

× I like singing in the bedroom when I wash my hair and it I I start to singing because it's me.

✓ I like singing in the bedroom when I wash my hair and I start singing because it's me.

The phrase 'start to singing' is incorrect because after 'start' we use either the base form of the verb or the verb with -ing, but not 'to' plus -ing. The correct form is 'start singing'. Also, the repeated 'it I I' seems to be a typo and was corrected to 'I'.

× It's filled me like relaxed and when I was in the car I like singing when I play music and I started singing in the car.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and when I am in the car I like singing when I play music and I start singing in the car.

The phrase 'It's filled me like relaxed' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'It makes me feel relaxed'. Also, 'when I was in the car' should be 'when I am in the car' to match the habitual action. 'I started singing' is changed to 'I start singing' to indicate habitual action.

× Actually, I don't remember how I learned singing, but I can say when I was a child my dad bought me a Bluetooth speaker and I I played music and I start singing.

✓ Actually, I don't remember how I learned to sing, but I can say when I was a child my dad bought me a Bluetooth speaker and I played music and I started singing.

The phrase 'learned singing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'learned to sing'. Also, 'I start singing' should be in past tense 'I started singing' to maintain consistency with the past narrative.

× I want to sing in the car because it makes me feel relaxed. Uh, but I choose listening and singing in the car because, uh, I started listening and singing, uh, it helped me develop an interesting.

✓ I want to sing in the car because it makes me feel relaxed. But I choose listening and singing in the car because I started listening and singing; it helped me develop an interest.

The phrase 'develop an interesting' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'interest'. Also, the sentence was adjusted for clarity and punctuation.

× In my opinion, singing can bring happiness as when people started singing. That person is very good and I think that person is very silent, that's all.

✓ In my opinion, singing can bring happiness. When people start singing, they feel good and calm, that's all.

The original sentence is unclear and has sentence structure issues. 'As when people started singing' is awkward; it is better to separate ideas. 'That person is very good and I think that person is very silent' is unclear; 'silent' is likely a misuse for 'calm' or 'peaceful'. The correction improves clarity and grammar.