Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子较长且重复表达“表达情感”，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions. For instance, I often sing to relieve anxiety or to celebrate when I'm happy.

提案: 回答较简短，缺少细节和连接词，建议补充更多信息并使用连接词使回答更完整。

例: I only learned singing during music classes in primary school, and since then, I haven't taken any formal lessons because I haven't felt the need.

提案: 回答结构不够清晰，句子较长且缺少连接词，建议分句表达并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Actually, I don't sing for anyone in particular. I usually sing at KTV for fun, and in my daily life, I sing just for myself because I enjoy it.

提案: 表达不够准确，存在语法和词汇错误，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，并注意语法正确。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring joy to people. When someone is happy, they often sing aloud, and their emotions can touch the hearts of others.

× I like singing because I think it's the way to express your emotion and your feelings and sometime I will sing a song to release my anxiety and if I was happy I will sing song to express my emotion.

✓ I like singing because I think it's the way to express your emotions and your feelings, and sometimes I will sing a song to release my anxiety, and if I am happy I will sing a song to express my emotions.

emotion 和 feelings 是可数名词，表示情感时通常用复数形式。sometime 应为 sometimes，表示“有时”。sing song 应为 sing a song，缺少冠词。was happy 应用现在时 am happy，因为表达的是习惯或一般情况。

× Except the music class in my primary school, I haven't learned singing because I don't have this demand.

✓ Except for the music class in my primary school, I haven't learned singing because I don't have this demand.

Except 后面通常接介词短语，需加介词 for，表示“除了……之外”。

× Except the music class in my primary school, I haven't learned singing because I don't have this demand.

✓ Except for the music class in my primary school, I haven't learned singing because I don't have this demand.

except 后面应接介词短语，需加介词 for，表示“除了……之外”。

× Actually I have no one to sing for because I always sing in the KTV and to have fun and in my daily routine I sing for me because I just want to sing a song.

✓ Actually I have no one to sing for because I always sing in the KTV to have fun, and in my daily routine I sing for myself because I just want to sing a song.

sing for me 应改为 sing for myself，反身代词用来表示动作回到自己身上。and to have fun 应与前句连贯，去掉 and。

× Actually I have no one to sing for because I always sing in the KTV and to have fun and in my daily routine I sing for me because I just want to sing a song.

✓ Actually I have no one to sing for because I always sing in the KTV to have fun, and in my daily routine I sing for myself because I just want to sing a song.

and to have fun 结构不完整，应与前句连贯，去掉 and。

× Yes, I see. I think thing can boring joys to the people, because if you're happy, you sing a song aloud. The emotion through the voice can go to the other people's heart.

✓ Yes, I see. I think things can bring joy to people, because if you're happy, you sing a song aloud. The emotion through the voice can reach other people's hearts.

thing 应为复数 things，joys 应为不可数名词 joy，表达“快乐”。boring 应改为 bring，意思是“带来”。the other people's heart 应为复数 hearts，表示“人们的心”。