Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и связным. Избегайте грамматических ошибок и неоконченных предложений. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте детали.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it has been my hobby since I was a child. When I was about five years old, my mother took me to a singing tutor, and I found it fascinating. Since then, singing has captured my attention and brought me a lot of joy.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и использовать связующие слова для плавности. Добавьте больше конкретики о вашем опыте и чувствах.

例: Yes, I started taking vocal lessons when I was about five years old, which was a new and fascinating experience for me. Since then, I have regularly sung and participated in various shows to improve my skills.

提案: Используйте правильные грамматические конструкции и связующие слова. Сделайте ответ более естественным и конкретным, объясняя свои чувства и цели.

例: I usually sing for my parents and relatives, but in the future, I would like to perform in public. I believe that public performances are a great opportunity to challenge myself and overcome the fear of singing in front of others.

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте ответ более связным, используя подходящие связующие слова. Добавьте конкретные причины и примеры.

例: Of course, singing brings happiness to people because I usually feel very good when I sing. In my opinion, it is a great way to reduce stress after work or studying and helps improve one's mood.

× In my opinion it's like hobby for me.

✓ In my opinion, it's like a hobby for me.

The noun 'hobby' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a'. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× my mom and I went to the singing tutor

✓ my mom and I went to the singing tutor's

When referring to a tutor as a person, the possessive form 'tutor's' is used to indicate the place or service provided by the tutor.

× Also it scraped my attention, so I.

✓ Also, it caught my attention, so I...

The verb 'scraped' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is 'caught my attention'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should be finished or rephrased.

× I went on my first vocal lesson

✓ I went to my first vocal lesson

The correct preposition with 'went' and 'lesson' is 'to', not 'on'. Also, 'went to a lesson' is the standard expression.

× So I usually sing and take part in different shows.

✓ So I usually sing and take part in different shows.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.

× I want to see in the public performance.

✓ I want to perform in public.

The phrase 'see in the public performance' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'perform in public' or 'sing in public'.

× it's really good opportunity to overcome yourself and don't afraid do it in public places.

✓ it's a really good opportunity to overcome yourself and not be afraid to do it in public places.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'really good opportunity'. Also, 'don't afraid do it' is incorrect; it should be 'not be afraid to do it'. The reflexive pronoun 'yourself' is acceptable here.

× singing bringing happiness to people

✓ singing brings happiness to people

The verb 'bring' needs to be in the third person singular present tense 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'.

× it's really good opportunity to reduce stress after the job and study.

✓ it's a really good opportunity to reduce stress after work and study.

The phrase 'after the job' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'after work'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'really good opportunity'.