Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki struktur jawaban dengan memberikan kalimat topik yang jelas, kemudian tambahkan satu atau dua detail spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran. Kurangi pengulangan (mis. "I like to hear my own voice" dan "I like to hear some songs") dan buat jawaban lebih ringkas (maksimal 4–5 kalimat). Contoh fokus: alasan emosional + contoh situasi konkret.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, when I’m stressed after work I sing my favorite songs to relax, and practicing regularly has improved my pitch. I particularly enjoy singing both quietly at home and loudly in the car.

提案: Buat jawaban lebih langsung dan percaya diri; mulai dengan topik sentence jelas (Yes/No + brief reason), lalu beri bukti atau contoh konkret (mis. rutinitas latihan). Kurangi kalimat seperti "I don't know" yang melemahkan. Gunakan penghubung untuk koherensi.

例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I practise singing every day which has noticeably improved my voice. For instance, I warm up each morning for 10 minutes and try new techniques from online tutorials, and this consistency helps me develop better control.

提案: Jawab dengan kalimat topik langsung, lalu tambahkan detail spesifik singkat (waktu, suasana, contoh lagu). Hindari frasa canggung seperti "until he snores" jika tidak relevan; fokuskan pada efek positif. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

例: I usually sing for my husband every night before bed to help him relax. For example, I often sing soft lullabies or acoustic versions of pop songs, and he finds my voice calming which helps him fall asleep faster.

提案: Beri alasan yang lebih terstruktur: setuju/tidak lalu jelaskan dengan contoh atau perbandingan. Hindari pengulangan kata dan kata yang berbelit. Gunakan penghubung seperti "however" atau "for example" untuk memperjelas argumen.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because upbeat songs lift people’s mood and encourage social connection. However, sad songs can also be valuable because they help people process emotions; for example, singing a cheerful tune at a party usually makes people smile, while a sad song might comfort someone who needs to release feelings.

× Oh, I really love singing because I feel like I can express my feelings through singing and I love to hear my own voice and I like to hear some songs and sing it more and sing it better.

✓ Oh, I really love singing because I feel I can express my feelings through singing, I love to hear my own voice, and I like to listen to songs and sing them more and better.

Multiple issues: inconsistent verb forms and pronoun agreement with plural noun 'songs'. Use 'listen to' with songs and 'sing them' (plural object pronoun). Remove redundant 'like to' repetitions and combine clauses for clarity. Maintain gerund 'singing' as subject and use parallel structure. Grammar problem type's ID:8

× I didn't really have a certain or professional training for singing, but I love to sing every day, so I think singing every day makes my voice better.

✓ I haven't really had any formal or professional training in singing, but I love to sing every day, so I think singing every day makes my voice better.

Use present perfect 'haven't had' to indicate experience up to now. 'Any' fits negative sentences better than 'a certain', and 'formal' is more natural than 'certain'. Use preposition 'in' with 'singing'. Grammar problem type's ID:5

× I don't know, but I hope that my hobby, my consistency of singing, can help perfect it.

✓ I don't know, but I hope that my hobby and consistency in singing can help me improve it.

Use 'help me improve it' instead of 'help perfect it' for natural collocation. 'Consistency in singing' is clearer than 'consistency of singing'. Modal 'can' is acceptable but phrase restructuring improves clarity. Grammar problem type's ID:4

× I love to sing for my husband every night before he goes to bed.

✓ I love to sing to my husband every night before he goes to bed.

Use 'sing to someone' rather than 'sing for' when indicating directed action toward a person. 'Sing for' can imply performing on behalf of others. Grammar problem type's ID:11

× I like to sing for him until he snores because I just need to sing to make him feel like more at ease and more relaxed and maybe he find my voice calming.

✓ I like to sing to him until he falls asleep because I just need to sing to make him feel more at ease and more relaxed, and maybe he finds my voice calming.

Replace 'until he snores' with 'until he falls asleep' for politeness and correctness. Use 'feel more at ease' (no 'like'). Subject-verb agreement: 'he finds' not 'he find'. Grammar problem type's ID:14

× I believe that singing can bring happiness to people but only positive songs to be sung because sad songs may bring a negativity to people because it can occur as sadness feeling.

✓ I believe that singing can bring happiness to people, but only happy songs should be sung because sad songs may bring negativity to people as they can cause feelings of sadness.

Several issues: use 'happy songs' instead of 'positive songs' for naturalness; use modal structure 'should be sung' for recommendation. Remove article 'a' before 'negativity' and use 'negativity' without article. Use plural subject 'they' to refer to 'sad songs' and 'can cause feelings of sadness' is natural. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer pronoun reference. Grammar problem type's ID:27

× So just happy songs can bring happiness.

✓ So only happy songs can bring happiness.

Use 'only' instead of 'just' for clearer emphasis; position 'only' before the noun phrase it modifies. 'Happy songs' is appropriate adjective use. Grammar problem type's ID:13