Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và câu bổ trợ ngắn gọn. Nên sửa lỗi như động từ chia, mạo từ và cấu trúc cảm xúc. Ví dụ: dùng “I really like singing” thay cho “I very like singing”, và nối ý bằng liên từ để rõ ràng hơn.

例: I really like singing because it helps me relax and feel happy after studying at school. It’s a good way to unwind and forget about my stress.

提案: Sửa lỗi thì và cấu trúc câu phủ định; tránh câu ngắn rời rạc, kết hợp ý thành một câu mạch lạc. Giải thích ngắn gọn nếu chưa học chính thức nhưng tự học hoặc hay hát giải trí.

例: I haven’t taken formal singing lessons, but I often sing for fun at home. As a hobby, I practise by listening to songs and trying to copy the singers.

提案: Sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cấu trúc: nói đối tượng (friends) và lý do rõ ràng. Chú ý chia động từ và giới từ, bỏ từ thừa. Nên dùng một hoặc hai câu đủ ý, có liên từ để kết nối lý do.

例: I prefer to sing for my friends because I feel comfortable around them. Singing with friends cheers me up and makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Mở rộng ý với lý do cụ thể, dùng cấu trúc câu đầy đủ và liên từ để tăng tính mạch lạc. Tránh dịch trực tiếp; nói how/why it brings happiness with một ví dụ ngắn.

例: Yes, I do. Singing can lift people’s mood because music releases emotions and helps people express themselves. For example, I feel much better after singing a cheerful song.

× Yes, I very like singing because it help me umm comfortable and happy after study at school.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because it helps me feel comfortable and happy after studying at school.

The student used incorrect present tense forms and adverb placement. 'very like' is incorrect; use 'really like' (adverb before verb). 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with third person singular subject ('it'). 'comfortable' needs 'feel' to link the adjective to the subject. 'after study at school' should be 'after studying at school' (use -ing form for the activity). Suggestions: place adverbs correctly, ensure subject-verb agreement for third-person singular, and use gerund after prepositions/time expressions.

× For me, I don't learned singing umm. Usually I sing. For my hobby, noisy.

✓ For me, I haven't learned to sing. Usually I sing for fun. My hobby is noisy.

The student mixed present negative auxiliary with past participle incorrectly: 'don't learned' is wrong. Use present perfect 'haven't learned' for experience up to now. 'learned singing' should be 'learned to sing' or 'learned singing' as noun phrase; 'to sing' is clearer. 'Usually I sing' is acceptable but 'for my hobby, noisy' is ungrammatical: missing verb and wrong adjective order. Correct to 'Usually I sing for fun' and 'My hobby is singing' or 'My hobby is noisy' (but that is odd) — here corrected to 'My hobby is noisy' to mirror original while making grammatical sense. Suggestions: use correct auxiliary verbs with past participles and include verbs in sentences that need them.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is already grammatically acceptable, but contextually the student later misuses prepositions. No change needed here. Note: In formal English, you could also say 'For whom do you want to sing?' Suggestions: be aware that ending a question with a preposition is acceptable in spoken English.

× I want to think with my friend because I feel comfortable when I singing my friend.

✓ I want to sing with my friend because I feel comfortable when I sing with my friend.

The student wrote 'think' instead of 'sing' and misused prepositions and verb forms. 'think with my friend' should be 'sing with my friend'. 'when I singing' is wrong; use base form after auxiliary or simple present: 'when I sing'. Also add 'with my friend' after 'sing' for clarity. Suggestions: choose correct verbs and use 'when I + base verb' for habitual actions.

× It helped me happy, it make me happy and.

✓ It helps me feel happy; it makes me happy.

The student used past tense 'helped' and base 'make' inconsistently. For habitual truth, use simple present: 'helps' and 'makes' must agree with third-person singular subject 'it'. Also add 'feel' to link 'happy' properly. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement in present tense and include linking verbs where needed.

× Yes I do. It bring happy people.

✓ Yes, I do. It brings happiness to people.

'It bring' is incorrect; for third-person singular use 'brings'. Also 'bring happy people' is awkward; use 'brings happiness to people' or 'makes people happy'. Suggestions: use proper third-person singular verb forms and choose collocations like 'bring happiness' or 'make people happy'.