Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the frequent pronunciation/word choice errors (e.g., “signing” → “singing”) and keep answers concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting example. Avoid redundancy (e.g., repeating that it relaxes you) and unnecessary filler words.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after work. For example, I often sing along to my favorite songs while driving home or cooking, and doing so always lifts my mood.

提案: Provide a direct, well-structured response: state whether you learned formally or informally, give a concise time frame or frequency, and a specific detail about how you practiced. Remove hesitations (umm, uh), unnecessary phrases, and grammar errors (e.g., “learnt” is fine but use "learned" or "learnt" consistently; “signing” → “singing”; fix word order).

例: Yes, I have. Over the past few years I’ve practiced singing informally by following online tutorials and singing with friends once a week, which helps me relax and improve my voice.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: name the person and give a specific reason with a concise supporting detail. Fix word choice and grammar ("sign"→"sing", add articles: "an influential person"). Avoid vague phrasing like "probably" unless necessary.

例: I would like to sing for my mother because she has been very influential in my life; singing to her would be a way to show my gratitude for everything she has done.

提案: Give a clear, structured opinion and support it with a specific reason and example. Correct vocabulary and grammar errors ("Sending"→"Singing", remove repeated words), and avoid fragments. Use a linking phrase to connect reason and example.

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it helps them relax and express emotions. For example, after a stressful day I sing to release tension and express how I feel, which improves my mood.

× Yes, I do like signing because it helps me relax after a long day at work.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because it helps me relax after a long day at work.

The word 'signing' (making signs) is the wrong verb; the intended activity is 'singing' (producing musical voice). This is a lexical error rather than grammar, but it affects correctness. Replace 'signing' with 'singing'.

× For example, I often sing along to my favorite songs on the way home or while cooking, and it always lifts my mood.

✓ For example, I often sing along to my favorite songs on the way home or while cooking, and it always lifts my mood.

This sentence is correct. The verb + -ing forms ('singing' as present participle in 'sing along' and 'cooking') are used appropriately. No change needed.

× Yes, I have umm, over the last years I probably got into signing and in generally just spending quality time with doing this because that allows me, like I said before, to relax, uh, which I think is a good approach to stay happy.

✓ Yes, over the last few years I probably got into singing and generally spent quality time doing this because it allows me, as I said before, to relax, which I think is a good way to stay happy.

Multiple issues: 'over the last years' should be 'over the last few years' (quantifier). 'Got into signing' should be 'got into singing' (word choice). 'In generally' is incorrect; use 'generally'. 'Spending quality time with doing this' is ungrammatical—use 'spent quality time doing this' to match past action. 'Like I said before' is better as 'as I said before'. Adjust tense consistency and word order.

× Uh, I will probably want to sign for my mom.

✓ Uh, I will probably want to sing for my mom.

Again 'sign' is incorrect word choice for musical performance; 'sing' is the correct verb. Keep future intention 'will probably want to' if speaker intends future desire.

× She's really influential person for me in my life and she just made me who I am now with, which really means a lot to me.

✓ She's a really influential person in my life and she has made me who I am now, which really means a lot to me.

Missing article 'a' before 'really influential person' (article error). Use preposition 'in my life' rather than 'for me in my life'. 'She just made me who I am now with' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'has made' to show influence up to now and remove redundant 'with'.

× Umm in my life. Sending acts as reference of not only relaxing but also expressing your thoughts, feelings and your emotions after a long day at work.

✓ Umm, in my life, singing serves not only to relax but also to express your thoughts, feelings, and emotions after a long day at work.

Sentence fragments and article/word choice errors: 'in my life.' should be connected to main clause. 'Sending' is wrong word; use 'singing'. 'Acts as reference of' is unnatural—use 'serves not only to' or 'is not only relaxing but also a way of expressing'. Also add commas in a list and remove redundant 'your' before 'emotions'.

× For example, by singing you can express your your opinion and in generally.

✓ For example, by singing you can express your opinion and, in general, share your feelings.

Repeated word 'your your' is an error. 'In generally' is incorrect; use 'in general'. The sentence structure is incomplete—'express your opinion and, in general, share your feelings' completes the thought. Recommend splitting into clearer clauses and avoid repetition.