Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good answer: clear topic sentence, relevant reasons, and a social example. To improve, correct minor repetition and use a wider range of vocabulary and a linking phrase to increase coherence. Keep responses concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it lets me express my emotions and unwind after a long day. Moreover, I often sing with friends at informal karaoke nights, which strengthens our friendships and lets us share musical tastes.

提案: Answer addresses the question but has errors and awkward phrasing ("I still think for fun"). Improve accuracy and add a linking word to show contrast between past lessons and current practice. Provide a brief specific example of what you practiced. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I learned to sing as part of my school's art program, where we practiced breathing and pitch exercises regularly. Nowadays I still sing for fun, for example at karaoke nights, which helps me relax and maintain my vocal skills.

提案: Clear and relevant answer, but there are some word-choice mistakes (use "singing" instead of "seeing") and slight redundancy. Improve by using a concise topic sentence and one specific detail about a family member or occasion. Use a linking word to explain reason.

例: I prefer to sing for my family because they have always supported my music. For instance, performing at family gatherings makes me feel relaxed and close to them, so they are usually my chosen audience.

提案: The answer has good ideas but contains many errors and incorrect words (e.g., "seeing", "chemicals like elephants"). To improve, correct vocabulary (use "singing" and "chemicals like endorphins"), organize ideas with linking phrases, and give a specific example or result. Limit to 3–4 clear sentences.

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it triggers chemicals like endorphins that reduce stress. Moreover, singing with others in a choir or at karaoke creates a sense of community, which boosts people's mood.

× I still think for fun now, especially at informal karaoke nights because it helps me relax and improve my voice.

✓ I still sing for fun now, especially at informal karaoke nights because it helps me relax and improve my voice.

The original sentence uses 'think' incorrectly where the verb 'sing' is required. This is a verb choice error and involves the incorrect use of a verb form that does not match intended meaning. Replace 'think' with the base verb 'sing' to convey the ongoing activity. Suggestion: use the correct base verb to describe habitual actions (present simple) for routines and hobbies.

× Seeing for them helps strengthen our bond and I feel most comfortable and relaxed performing in front of them, so I usually choose them as my audience.

✓ Singing for them helps strengthen our bond and I feel most comfortable and relaxed performing in front of them, so I usually choose them as my audience.

The phrase 'Seeing for them' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'singing' not 'seeing'. This is a word-choice error rather than a preposition issue, but it fits the provided list most closely as an incorrect prepositional/verb use. Replace with 'Singing for them' to correctly indicate performing for family. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× I agree that seeing can make people happier.

✓ I agree that singing can make people happier.

'Seeing' is a wrong verb choice; the context is about singing. Use 'singing' (gerund) to refer to the activity in general. Keep present simple meaning to state a general truth.

× Seeing helps our brain really feel good.

✓ Singing helps our brains really feel good.

Two issues: wrong verb 'Seeing' should be 'Singing' and 'brain' should be plural 'brains' or 'our brain' can be singular but sounds odd; 'our brains' correctly matches the plural pronoun 'our'. Use 'really feel good' is acceptable, but better: 'Singing makes us feel good.' Either correction maintains agreement between pronoun and noun.

× Chemicals like elephants and let us express emotions which reduces stress.

✓ Chemicals like endorphins are released and let us express emotions, which reduces stress.

The original contains 'elephants' which is a wrong word; likely intended 'endorphins' or 'chemicals' and missing verb. Also punctuation needed before 'which'. Correct by specifying 'endorphins are released' to show the process, and add comma before 'which'. This fixes lexical error and sentence structure.

× Singing with others, for example in a choir or at karaoke also creates a sense of community and belonging, so I think it can really boost people's mood.

✓ Singing with others, for example in a choir or at karaoke, also creates a sense of community and belonging, so I think it can really boost people's moods.

Add a comma after 'karaoke' for correct punctuation. Change 'people's mood' to 'people's moods' to match plural 'people' (singular vs plural agreement). This is a singular/plural agreement issue; 'moods' is more natural when referring to multiple people.