Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は理由を述べている点は良いですが、文法ミス（時制・助動詞・冠詞）、繰り返し、語順の乱れがあり、表現が不自然です。もっと簡潔な主題文を置き、理由を明確に2文以内で説明してください。例えば過去の経験について話すときは過去形を一貫して使い、不要な繰り返しを避けてください。また“music”は不可算名詞なので冠詞に注意しましょう。

例: No, I don't enjoy singing. When I was in high school I struggled with singing and got low marks in music, so I prefer listening to music rather than performing.

提案: 内容は経験を述べている点は良いですが、文法や語彙の誤り（'learnt' vs 'learned' acceptable, 'a roundabout'不自然、'listening to a lot of musics'は不可算名詞）や構文の不一致（混合した時制と形）があります。まず直接に“Yes/No”や短い主題文で答え、次に具体的な行動（where, how often, what）を一つか二つの文で述べ、接続語でつなぎましょう。

例: Yes, I learned some singing at school. I practised regularly in the music room and listened to many songs from other countries to improve my pronunciation and style.

提案: 意図（家族に歌いたい）が明確で良いですが、語彙選択と文法（'inquiry me'誤用、'tell my thanks'より自然な表現は 'show/express my gratitude'）に改善が必要です。理由を示す際は具体例（誰が、どんな時に、どんな曲で）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。

例: I'd like to sing for my family because they've always supported me. For example, I would perform a simple, heartfelt song at a family gathering to express my gratitude.

提案: 肯定して理由を挙げている点は良いですが、表現の自然さ（'very appearing'不自然）や語彙選択、流暢さの改善が必要です。より具体的な理由（気分を高める・感情を共有する・文化的つながり）と一つの明確な例を短く述べ、曖昧な語を避けてください。

例: Yes. Singing can lift people's moods and help them connect emotionally. For instance, musical films often draw large audiences because memorable songs make viewers feel joyful and nostalgic.

× I do not like singing because when I was a high school student, I cannot, I couldn't get a high score in my in my music subject and and I really like listening to the music.

✓ I do not like singing because when I was a high school student, I could not get a high score in my music subject and I really like listening to music.

The sentence mixes present and past modal forms. Use 'could not' to describe inability in the past, not 'cannot' or 'couldn't' together. Remove duplicate words 'in my' and duplicate conjunction 'and'. Also use 'listening to music' (no article) for the general activity. Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:5

× It's a roundabout, singing songs.

✓ It's a roundabout way of singing songs.

The original lacks a noun after 'roundabout'; 'roundabout' needs a noun like 'way' to be grammatical. Use the noun 'way' and the gerund phrase 'of singing songs' is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'roundabout way of' to express indirect method. Grammar problem type ID:8

× When I was at school, I practiced in the music room at school and listening to a lot of musics in foreign countries.

✓ When I was at school, I practiced in the music room and listened to a lot of music from foreign countries.

Parallel structure error: after 'practiced' the coordinated verb must match tense and form, so use 'listened' (simple past) not 'listening'. 'Musics' is uncountable and should be 'music'. 'In foreign countries' is better phrased as 'from foreign countries'. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel and use correct countability for 'music'. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I want to sing for my family members because they always support and inquiry me. I want to tell my thanks to them.

✓ I want to sing for my family members because they always support and encourage me. I want to thank them.

'Inquiry me' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'encourage'. 'Tell my thanks' is unnatural; use the verb 'thank' or the phrase 'express my thanks'. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs and simpler phrasing like 'thank them'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× For example, movies which focus on music, uh, attract a lot of audiences because the songs are very appearing for them.

✓ For example, movies that focus on music attract large audiences because the songs are very appealing to them.

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