Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 发音和拼写错误需要改正（例如'sini'应为'sing'）；回答应更精准且不冗长。先给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体理由并用连接词连接。注意时态和动词形式（如 'I like listening to them'）。建议把句子拆成简短、清晰的句子，并使用更自然的表达。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. When I sing my favorite songs, I can express my emotions, and listening to those songs always cheers me up.

提案: 句子过长且有语法错误（例如 'my in music teacher'、'talented on singing'）。按规则先给主题句，然后补充具体细节，用连接词使结构连贯。例如说明什么时候、在哪里学习、老师的评价以及你后来是否继续练习。

例: Yes, I learned some singing at primary school because we had music lessons. My music teacher thought I had talent, so she gave me extra help after class and I practiced what she taught me regularly.

提案: 注意时态和语法（例如 'We have knew' 应为 'We have known' 或 'We knew'；'she sing' 应为 'she sang'）。回答应更直接，先说想为谁唱，再说明原因和背景，最后补充现在的意图。避免重复信息。

例: I would like to sing for my best friend because we have known each other since junior high. Back then she often sang to me, but I was too shy to sing back. Now I want to return her kindness by singing for her.

提案: 回答思路清楚但表达不够自然（例如 'seeing the songs' 应为 'songs with a happy style'）。可以先给出直接观点，然后用一两句例子或原因支持观点，使用连接词 like 'for example' 或 'however' 保持连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing or happy songs can make people feel joyful because upbeat melodies and positive lyrics lift the mood. However, sad songs can also move people and help them process emotions.

× Yes, I like sini because I think sini can help me feel relaxed as I can show all of my feelings into the songs and also I think sing my favorite songs can also make me feel happy as I like listen to them very much.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think singing can help me feel relaxed as I can put all of my feelings into the songs, and I also think singing my favorite songs can make me feel happy because I like listening to them very much.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 形式（用作动名词或现在分词）。 1) 原句中出现的“sini”应为“singing”。这里需要动名词形式作名词，表示“唱歌”这项活动。 2) “I think sing my favorite songs”中的“sing”应改为动名词“singing”，因为在“I think”后面要表达喜欢做某事，动名词作宾语更自然。 3) “show all of my feelings into the songs”中应使用动词短语“put ... into ...”，因此改为“put all of my feelings into the songs”。 4) “I like listen to them”中“listen”应为动名词“listening”作宾语。 建议：当表达“喜欢做某事”或把动词当作名词使用时，使用动名词（动词+ing）；注意固定搭配如“put ... into ...”和“listen to ...”。

× Sure, when I was at primary school we had music lessons and during the lessons we learned how to sing and also my in music teacher thought that I was very talented on singing so she also taught me how to sing after the lessons.

✓ Sure, when I was at primary school we had music lessons and during the lessons we learned how to sing. Also, my music teacher thought that I was very talented at singing, so she taught me how to sing after the lessons.

错误类型：过去时与介词/短语搭配不当。 1) “my in music teacher”结构错误，应为“my music teacher”。 2) “talented on singing”中介词不当，正确搭配是“talented at singing”。 3) 句子过长且缺少适当标点，分为两句更清晰。 建议：注意常见搭配（talented at），删除多余词，并使用标点分隔长句以提高可读性。

× The first one that I want to sing for is one of my best friends. We have knew each other since junior high school and during that time she liked singing very much and every day she sing songs for me. However, at that time I was very shy and now I want to sing for her also.

✓ The first person I want to sing for is one of my best friends. We have known each other since junior high school. During that time she liked singing very much and every day she sang songs for me. However, I was very shy then, and now I want to sing for her too.

错误类型：代词和时态使用不当。 1) “The first one that I want to sing for”中“one”指人时用“person”更自然；此外可省略“that”。 2) “We have knew each other”混用了现在完成时和过去式，应为“have known”或“knew”。因为强调从过去到现在的持续关系，应使用现在完成时“have known”。 3) “every day she sing songs”主谓时态不一致，应该用过去时“sang”。 4) “at that time ... now ... also”时态和连词需要调整，“also”放在句尾不如“too”自然。 建议：注意代词指人时选择合适名词，保持时态一致（从过去持续到现在用have known），主谓一致并使用合适的副词位置。

× Personally, I think seeing the songs which style is very happy can bring happiness to people. However, if the song's style is not very happy, then it can also bring sadness to people.

✓ Personally, I think songs with a very happy style can bring happiness to people. However, if a song's style is not very happy, it can bring sadness to people.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当与句子结构不自然。 1) “seeing the songs which style is very happy”结构不正确，应改为“songs with a very happy style”或“songs whose style is very happy”。 2) 第二句中“then it can also bring sadness”中“also”不必要且位置稍显不自然，改为更简洁的表述。 建议：使用正确的定语从句或介词短语（with / whose），使句子更自然简洁。