Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で理由も述べられていますが、文法ミス（時制、冠詞）、語彙の選び方、自然さに改善の余地があります。具体的には “when I was a child” と “I watched the Frozen” の組み合わせはやや不自然で、“the Frozen” は単に “Frozen” とします。また “I was into the song from this movie” はより自然な表現（“I loved the songs from that movie”）にできます。改良にあたっては、主題文→理由→具体例の順で2〜3文にまとめ、接続詞（because, so）を使って流れを整えてください。

例: Yes, I do. I’ve loved singing since I was a child because I grew up watching Frozen and really enjoyed its songs. Because of that, I started singing along often and it became one of my favorite hobbies.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、複数の重大な誤りがあります（“learned how to think” は意味が変わる、文法と語彙の誤用、冗長で曖昧な表現）。まず明確に「習ったことはない」と言い、理由を簡潔に述べてください（費用や趣味としての認識）。さらに“it's not well” の代わりに “I’m not very good” のような具体表現を使ってください。接続詞を取り入れて一貫した2〜3文にまとめると良いです。

例: No, I’ve never had formal singing lessons because they are quite expensive and I treated singing as a hobby. However, sometimes I wish I had lessons because I’m not very confident about my technique.

提案: 答えは意図が伝わりますが、表現の明確性と文法を改善してください。“It's just for me” と “I like to sing in front of audience” が矛盾して聞こえるため、どちらを強調したいか決めて表現を整理しましょう。また単数・複数（an audience / audiences / my friends）に注意し、具体例をもう少し自然な語順で述べてください。

例: Mostly I sing for myself, but I also enjoy singing in front of an audience. For example, I always have fun singing for my friends when we go to karaoke.

提案: 意見と理由、具体例があり良い構成ですが、語法と自然さを向上させられます。“it makes us happy” を “it can make people happy” のように一般化すると自然です。また “I'm always feeling well” は不自然で “I always feel better” などが適切です。接続詞を使って原因と結果をつなげ、2〜3文で簡潔に述べてください。

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because it helps me relax and lift my mood. For example, after a karaoke session I always feel better and more refreshed.

× Yes, I like singing because when I was a child I watched the Frozen and I was into the song from this movie.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I was a child I watched Frozen and I was into the songs from that movie.

The article 'the' before film titles is unnecessary; use the film title without 'the'. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' because a movie usually has multiple songs and the student likely means the songs in general; 'that movie' is clearer than 'this movie' when referring back to a previously mentioned film.

× No, I've never learned how to think because it's a bit pricey and I think singing is just hobby.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing because it's a bit pricey and I think singing is just a hobby.

The student wrote 'learned how to think' but intended 'learned how to sing' — this is a word choice error rather than grammar category on the list, but it affects meaning. Also, 'just hobby' is missing the article 'a' before countable noun 'hobby'. Use present perfect 'I've never learned' to show experience up to now.

× Sometimes I want to learn how to sing because it's not well.

✓ Sometimes I want to learn how to sing because I'm not good at it.

'It's not well' is incorrect: 'well' is an adverb and cannot describe the subject 'it' in this context. Use 'not good at it' to describe ability. Maintain present simple for general ability statements.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing? (Informal: Who do you want to sing for?)

Both word orders are acceptable in spoken English; 'For whom do you want to sing?' is more formal and avoids ending the sentence with a preposition. The original is not strictly incorrect in casual speech.

× It's just for me, but I like to sing in front of audience.

✓ It's just for me, but I like to sing in front of an audience.

'Audience' is a countable noun here and needs an article: 'an audience' or 'audiences'. Use 'an audience' for a single general performance audience.

× For example, when I go to karaoke with my friend, I always enjoy singing a song for friends.

✓ For example, when I go to karaoke with my friend, I always enjoy singing songs for my friends.

Use plural 'songs' to indicate repeatedly singing, and 'for my friends' specifies whose friends; 'for friends' is vague. Also keep possessive 'my friend' consistent with 'my friends'.

× Yes, of course it makes us happy because when I sing a song I feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, of course it makes people happy because when I sing I feel relaxed.

'It makes us happy' is acceptable but 'people' is more general. 'Sing a song' is redundant; 'when I sing' is more natural. Use present simple for general truths.

× For example, after going to karaoke, I'm always feeling well.

✓ For example, after going to karaoke, I always feel well.

Avoid the progressive 'I'm always feeling' with a state verb; use simple present 'I always feel' to describe habitual feelings. 'Feel well' is acceptable; 'feel good' is another option.