Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and word choice. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “I do like training so much”) and grammar errors (use past tense correctly: “I started learning” or “I have been learning”).

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I started learning it when I was a child and it helps me express my feelings. For example, singing calms me after a stressful day and lets me share emotions I find hard to say in words.

提案: Answer directly and fix grammar and phrasing. Use a clear past tense timeline and avoid idiomatic expressions that may be unclear (“is my stuff”). Provide a specific detail about lessons or progress and link ideas with a connector (e.g., “because” or “so”).

例: Yes, I have. I began formal singing lessons in middle school and quickly realised I loved it. Because lessons taught me breathing and pitch control, singing became a way to relax and recharge after school.

提案: Correct vocabulary and tense mistakes and be concise. Use a clear topic sentence naming the person, then give a specific reason and an example of what you might sing or when. Avoid repetition and ensure pronouns and verbs agree.

例: I would like to sing for my mother because she has always supported me. For instance, I would sing a heartfelt song at her birthday to show my gratitude for everything she has done.

提案: Make the answer more precise and grammatical. Start with a direct opinion, then give a specific reason and example using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Correct subject-verb agreement and modal usage (e.g., “can really show”).

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it shows genuine emotion and connects listeners. For example, a cheerful song at a party can lift everyone’s mood and encourage people to sing along.

提案: Good content and specific examples. Improve naturalness by avoiding exaggerated phrases like “so obsessed” in formal speaking, and combine sentences to be concise. Mention what you admire specifically (tone, technique) to add detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to singers such as Ariana Grande and Justin Bieber because their vocal control and tone communicate emotion effectively. I especially admire Ariana’s range and Justin’s way of conveying feeling in his phrasing.

提案: Use consistent past tense and more precise phrasing. Begin with a clear yes/no, then state when and what you learned with one or two concrete examples (techniques or exercises). Avoid awkward phrasing like “make songs properly.”

例: Yes, I took professional singing classes in primary school. In those lessons I learned breathing techniques and how to control pitch, which helped me express emotions more clearly when I sing.