Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有逻辑但存在多处语法和用词错误，且有重复表达。需要：1) 用正确的词汇（singing 而非 seeing）；2) 用一到两句主题句直接回答问题；3) 提供一两个具体原因并用连接词衔接；4) 控制在3–4句内以更自然流畅的方式表达。

例: To be honest, I don't really enjoy singing because I feel I lack the talent. As a result, I often feel insecure when I sing, so I usually avoid it.

提案: 回答直接但略显冗长且有语法问题。改进点：1) 先直接回答（Yes/No）并给出简洁原因；2) 用更自然的表达连接童年兴趣与学习选择；3) 尽量减少不必要的细节并保持句子简短。

例: No, I haven't. When I was a child I was more interested in traditional Chinese painting because reading ancient poetry inspired me, so I spent my time on painting instead.

提案: 回答不合适且语气可能被视为冒犯。改进点：1) 给出礼貌且合乎常理的回答；2) 先回答然后解释原因并用连接词衔接；3) 避免负面或攻击性语言；4) 保持简短自然。

例: Actually I rarely sing for anyone, but if I did, it would be for a close friend at a casual gathering because I feel more comfortable singing around people I trust.

提案: 总体回答好且积极，但有语法和词汇细节可改进。改进点：1) 用更地道的短语（e.g. "lift my mood" 而非 "light my mood up"）；2) 将形容词放置恰当位置（"an extremely beautiful voice"）；3) 保持句子简洁并用连接词增强衔接。

例: Definitely. A friend of mine has an extremely beautiful voice, and when she sings for me it lifts my mood and makes me feel really happy.

提案: 回答内容明确，但有语法和用词小错误。改进点：1) 主谓一致（"voice always makes"）；2) 用更自然的表达（"help me fall asleep" 而非 "make me sleep quickly"）；3) 合并句子以保持流畅。

例: Yes. My favorite singer is Lin Jing Jie; his tender voice often helps me fall asleep, and listening to his songs is a great way for me to relax.

提案: 回答直接但语气略显绝对和重复。改进点：1) 用更自然的时态与表达（"No, I haven't"）；2) 用更礼貌和合理的解释（e.g. prioritizing other interests）；3) 用连接词使句子更连贯并避免重复。

例: No, I haven't. As I mentioned, I don't consider myself musically talented, so I prefer to spend my time and money on activities I enjoy more.

× To be honest, I don't really enjoy seeing because I don't have related talent.

✓ To be honest, I don't really enjoy singing because I don't have the related talent.

错误类型：动词后接 -ing 形式使用错误。句中本意是指“唱歌”，应使用动词 "sing" 的 -ing 形式 "singing"。原句误用了 "seeing"（看见），成为意义和词形错误。建议：确认动词词根，表示喜好后用动词 + -ing（例如：enjoy singing）。

× Thus when I'm singing a song, I'll feel not confident.

✓ Thus, when I'm singing a song, I don't feel confident.

错误类型：副词和否定结构位置不当。英语中否定通常使用 don't/doesn't + 动词，而不是在动词后直接加 'not'（在此时 'feel not confident' 不自然）。此外句首应加逗号。建议：把否定放在助动词前：I don't feel confident。

× I don't like this kind of sense, so I usually avoid to sing.

✓ I don't like this feeling, so I usually avoid singing.

错误类型：动词后接 -ing 形式使用错误 和 词汇搭配不当。'avoid' 后应接动名词（-ing），不能接不定式 'to sing'。此外 'this kind of sense' 用法不自然，改为 'this feeling' 更贴切。建议：记住 'avoid' 后接动名词，使用恰当名词表达感受。

× When I was a child, I preferred to learn Chinese traditional painting because at that time I learned some Chinese ancient poetry.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred learning Chinese traditional painting because at that time I had learned some ancient Chinese poetry.

错误类型：过去时使用不准确。原句中 'preferred to learn' 可改为 'preferred learning'（更自然），且表示在那段时间之前已经学过的动作应使用过去完成时 'had learned'。建议：描述过去背景时，注意区分一般过去与过去完成。

× In this poetry, Chinese traditional painting was characterized as an elegant art, which made me really curious about that.

✓ In that poetry, Chinese traditional painting was described as an elegant art, which made me really curious about it.

错误类型：形容词/副词或表达搭配不当。'characterized as' 在这里不如 'described as' 自然；'in this poetry' 改为 'in that poetry' 或更自然的 'in that poem'；代词 'that' 用于指事物时需用 'it'。建议：选择恰当动词（describe）并用正确的指代词 'it'。

× Well, maybe someone I really hate because I don't have a beautiful voice so unless I want to bother someone I won't sing a song.

✓ Well, maybe someone I really dislike, because I don't have a beautiful voice, so unless I want to bother someone I won't sing.

错误类型：代词和人称用词不当。'hate' 用于日常口语可换 'dislike' 更礼貌；'sing a song' 中的 'a song' 可省略使表达更自然；句子需要逗号分隔从句。建议：注意礼貌用词和从句标点，省略多余名词以使表达简洁。

× One of my friends has an extreme beautiful voice.

✓ One of my friends has an extremely beautiful voice.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用错误。'extreme' 是形容词，修饰形容词时应使用副词 'extremely'。建议：当修饰形容词或副词时使用副词形式，例如 'extremely beautiful'。

× Sometimes when she sings a song for me I'll feel very happy and that really light my mood up.

✓ Sometimes when she sings for me, I feel very happy and that really lifts my mood.

错误类型：副词位置与动词搭配错误。'light my mood up' 用法不正确，应使用 'lift my mood' 或 'brighten my mood'；此外时态和主谓一致应为 'I feel' 而非 'I'll feel'（这里是习惯性事实）。建议：使用常见搭配 'lift/brighten my mood'，并匹配正确时态。

× His tender voice always make me sleep quickly at night.

✓ His tender voice always makes me fall asleep quickly at night.

错误类型：一般现在时和主谓一致。主语 'His tender voice' 是第三人称单数，谓语应为 'makes' 而不是 'make'；'make me sleep quickly' 不自然，常用表达是 'make me fall asleep quickly'。建议：注意第三人称单数动词变化，并使用常见表达 'fall asleep'。

× No, I didn't.

✓ No, I haven't.

错误类型：时态使用不当。问题是 'Have you ever taken a singing class?'，回答应使用现在完成时 'No, I haven't.' 而不是一般过去 'No, I didn't.'。建议：对 'ever' 提问使用现在完成时回答。

× As I mentioned, I don't think I have music talent, so I don't want to waste my time and money.

✓ As I mentioned, I don't think I have musical talent, so I don't want to waste my time and money.

错误类型：冠词/词类使用。'music talent' 词序和词类不当，应使用形容词 'musical' 修饰 'talent'（或说 'a talent for music'）。建议：注意名词前形容词形式或使用 'a talent for ...' 结构。

× I want to save this resource to do something I really like.

✓ I want to save my resources to do something I really like.

错误类型：量词/指代使用不当。'this resource' 用法不自然，应改为 'my resources' 或具体 'my time and money'。建议：使用复数或明确指出要节省的资源（time and money）。