List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha net ve anlamlı hale getirmek için gereksiz tekrarları ve eksik kelimeleri düzeltmelisiniz. Örneğin, alışveriş yaparken liste yapmadığınızı açıkça belirtip, neden bazen telefonunuza not aldığınızı açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: I usually don't make a shopping list, but if I plan to bake a cake and realize I'm missing some ingredients, I quickly jot them down on my phone.

提案: Cümleniz karışık ve anlaşılması zor. Daha açık ve doğrudan cevaplar vermelisiniz. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları ve eksik cümleleri düzeltmelisiniz. İş için liste yapmanın faydasını ve nasıl kullandığınızı net bir şekilde açıklayın.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for work. It helps me keep track of tasks I need to complete during my classes, such as reading materials or preparing notes.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden bazı insanların liste yapmayı sevmediğini daha spesifik ve mantıklı şekilde açıklayın.

例: Some people may feel that making lists wastes their time, so they prefer to rely on memory instead of writing things down.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime seçiminde yanlışlıklar var. Daha doğru ve doğal ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, tercih nedeninizi daha açık ve mantıklı şekilde açıklayın.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I am less likely to lose it compared to paper, and it's more convenient to edit and access anytime.

× Actually I'm not making a list when I go to the shop.

✓ Actually, I don't make a list when I go to the shop.

The sentence describes a habitual action, so the simple present tense 'don't make' is appropriate instead of the present continuous 'I'm not making'.

× If I want to do specific things ex. Especially like some cake and some and if some ingredients are missing, I'm writing on my phone.

✓ If I want to do specific things, especially like some cake, and if some ingredients are missing, I write on my phone.

The phrase 'ex.' is informal and unclear; it should be replaced with 'especially like'. Also, 'I'm writing' should be 'I write' to indicate habitual action. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas for clarity.

× Of course, I make a list when I work because I'm looking, I'm looking at paper and I'm seeing what I have to do in this class.

✓ Of course, I make a list when I work because I look at paper and see what I have to do in this class.

The present continuous 'I'm looking' and 'I'm seeing' are incorrect here because the sentence describes habitual actions; simple present tense 'I look' and 'see' should be used.

× If I had to make some read, I'm writing.

✓ If I have to do some reading, I write.

The phrase 'make some read' is incorrect; it should be 'do some reading'. Also, 'I'm writing' should be 'I write' to indicate habitual action. The verb 'have' is used instead of 'had' to match the present context.

× You should need to read something. You should need to write something. You should need to.

✓ You should read something. You should write something. You should do so.

The phrase 'should need to' is redundant and incorrect. 'Should' already expresses necessity or advice, so 'need to' is unnecessary. The last sentence is incomplete and is corrected to 'You should do so.' for clarity.

× They might be thinking that's making list is such a waste time.

✓ They might think that making a list is such a waste of time.

The phrase 'that's making list' is incorrect; it should be 'that making a list'. Also, 'waste time' needs the article 'a' to become 'a waste of time'. The verb 'might be thinking' is better as 'might think' for this context.

× Perhaps they don't want to waste time waste their time while making a list.

✓ Perhaps they don't want to waste their time while making a list.

The phrase 'waste time waste their time' is redundant. Only 'waste their time' is needed. The sentence is corrected by removing the repeated phrase.

× I prefer making a list on my phone because I don't want to lost paper when I go outside, but there's no possibility to lost my phone and it's like more easy than making a list on paper I guess.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because I don't want to lose paper when I go outside, but there's no possibility of losing my phone and it's easier than making a list on paper, I guess.

The verb 'lost' is the past tense and should be 'lose' (base form) after 'want to'. Also, 'possibility to lost' should be 'possibility of losing'. 'More easy' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'easier'. Commas are added for clarity.