List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'go to shopping' 대신 'go shopping'을 사용하고, 'use a timer efficiency'는 의미가 명확하지 않습니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고, 구체적인 이유 설명이 부족합니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 확장하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save time. Since there are many distractions in the mall, having a list allows me to focus and shop efficiently.

提案: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고, 문장 구조가 명확하지 않습니다. 'save a time' 대신 'save time'을 사용하고, 'it is work very efficiently'는 올바른 표현이 아닙니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 부족하여 답변이 산만하게 느껴집니다. 명확한 주제문과 구체적인 이유를 연결어와 함께 사용해 답변을 개선하세요.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work for the same reason. It helps me save time and concentrate on my tasks because I can avoid distractions and work more efficiently.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'it requires some time'과 'feels like tired' 같은 표현은 부자연스럽습니다. 더 명확하고 간결한 문장으로, 구체적인 이유를 논리적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because it takes time and can feel stressful. Also, they might feel uncertain about what to include, which makes the task tiring.

提案: 표현이 부자연스럽고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'when I wear something's on the paper'는 의미가 불분명하며, 'prefer paper no more'는 올바른 표현이 아닙니다. 명확한 이유와 함께 자연스러운 문장으로 답변을 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because writing things down helps me remember them better. Also, my phone has too much information, so it's harder to find my list quickly.

× Yes, I usually make a list when I go to shopping.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping.

'Go shopping' is a fixed expression and does not require the preposition 'to'. Using 'to' here is incorrect.

× At first I write the list because I can use a timer efficiency.

✓ At first I write the list because I can use a timer efficiently.

The adverb form 'efficiently' should be used to modify the verb 'use', not the adjective 'efficiency'.

× In the shopping mall there is a lot of attraction, but if I write it then I don't have to spend the time on there.

✓ In the shopping mall there are a lot of attractions, but if I write it then I don't have to spend time there.

'Attraction' should be plural 'attractions' to match 'a lot of'. Also, 'there is' should be 'there are' for plural. 'Spend the time on there' is incorrect; it should be 'spend time there'.

× I can save a time that I have to focus on my task and I can concentrate on it.

✓ I can save time so that I can focus on my task and concentrate on it.

'Time' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I can neglect some distractions and other things and it is work very efficiently.

✓ I can ignore some distractions and other things, and it helps me work very efficiently.

'Neglect' is not commonly used with distractions; 'ignore' is better. 'It is work' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps me work'.

× And yes.

✓ Yes.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and unnecessary here.

× I think because to make a list it requires some time, so it can be a little bit stressful to another person.

✓ I think making a list requires some time, so it can be a little bit stressful for some people.

'Stressful to another person' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'stressful for'.

× And also to write a list a little bit feels like tired because they have to do it is little bit feeling like a doubt.

✓ Also, writing a list can feel a little tiring because they have to do it, which can cause some doubt.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical; restructuring improves clarity and grammar.

× I think I prefer to make a list on paper because when I wear something's on the paper then I think I can remember it for a long time and also I think it's more comfortable.

✓ I think I prefer to make a list on paper because when I write something on paper, I think I can remember it for a long time, and also I think it's more comfortable.

'Wear' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'write'. Also, 'something's' should be 'something'.

× And in my phone there's too many like information on there so it is hard to find it.

✓ And on my phone, there's too much information, so it is hard to find it.

'Information' is uncountable, so 'too many' should be 'too much'. Also, 'in my phone' is better as 'on my phone'.

× So I prefer paper no more.

✓ So I prefer paper now.

'No more' is incorrect in this context; 'now' is the appropriate adverb to express current preference.