List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers like 'umm' and 'uh' which reduce fluency. Try to avoid unnecessary pauses and fillers to sound more natural. Also, make your sentences concise and clear without redundancy.

例: Yes, I make a shopping list because it helps me organize my finances and avoid buying unnecessary items impulsively.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, especially the last part 'on the basis of our' which seems unfinished. Avoid repetition like 'and and' and try to complete your thoughts clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me prioritize tasks effectively and manage my time better.

提案: There are repetitions like 'I I' and 'some people people' which affect fluency. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and explain your ideas with linking words for coherence.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it unnecessary and bothersome; however, I believe they often keep lists in their minds instead.

提案: Good answer with clear reasons and contrast. To improve, you can add linking words like 'because' and 'however' more smoothly and avoid minor grammatical slips like 'make it' instead of 'make them'.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, so I can review my list anytime and anywhere. However, I used to make lists on paper in the past.

× I do make a list when I go shopping as it helps me with, umm, organizing my finances, uh, by preventing uh, in unnecessary items, uh, that I buy on impulse.

✓ I do make a list when I go shopping as it helps me with, umm, organizing my finances, uh, by preventing unnecessary items, uh, that I buy on impulse.

The phrase 'in unnecessary items' is incorrect because the preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'preventing unnecessary items'. This is a preposition usage issue but also affects the plural noun phrase. Removing 'in' corrects the sentence.

× I generally make a list for my work and and yes, it does work a lot.

✓ I generally make lists for my work and yes, they do work a lot.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' because the student refers to multiple tasks and uses 'them' later. Also, 'it does work' should be 'they do work' to agree with the plural subject 'lists'. This is a singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement issue.

× I use them to prioritize my work on the basis of our.

✓ I use them to prioritize my work on the basis of urgency.

The phrase 'on the basis of our' is incomplete and unclear. It seems the student intended to say 'on the basis of urgency' or a similar word. This is a sentence structure error that affects clarity.

× I I think they some people people don't like making list because they find it unnecessary and quite bothersome to make a list.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they find it unnecessary and quite bothersome to make a list.

The phrase 'making list' should be 'making lists' to match plural usage. Also, the repeated words 'they some people people' is an error and should be corrected to 'some people'. This is a singular and plural issue and sentence structure error.

× However, I do believe they make a list on their mind.

✓ However, I do believe they make a list in their mind.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to something existing mentally. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns issue.

× I prefer to make them on my phone as I carry them with me all the time and I can review my list anywhere and anytime I want.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone as I carry them with me all the time and I can review my lists anywhere and anytime I want.

The pronoun 'them' refers to 'lists', so 'lists' should be plural to match. Also, 'my list' should be 'my lists' for consistency. This is a singular and plural issue.

× However, in the past I used to make it on paper.

✓ However, in the past I used to make them on paper.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'lists' in plural form. This is a singular and plural issue.