List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma thulo bhag ma thik chha tara kehi bhul haru chhan jasle gardaa uttar ko spashtata ra prabhav kam hunchha. Tapai le sentence haru lai sajilo ra prabhavshali banau, jastai 'forgot' ko thau ma 'forget' ra 'bought' ko thau ma 'buy' prayog garnu parcha. Arko kura, 'sobbing' shabda ko prayog thik chhaina, yo 'shopping' huna parcha. Tapai le linking words jastai 'because', 'also' ra 'so' ko prayog ramro gareko chha, tara sentence haru lai thap spasht ra sankshipta banau. 5 sentence bhitra nai uttar dina prayas garnu.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember everything I need. Also, it prevents me from forgetting important items. For example, my mother and I always prepare a list before shopping to ensure we buy everything necessary. This way, we feel more satisfied with our shopping experience.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi confusion chha ra grammar ko samasya chha. 'I'm not into our work' bhannu ko thau ma 'I don't have work' ya 'I'm a student' bhannu ramro hunchha. Sentence haru lai spasht ra sangaathit banau, ra linking words ko prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau. Tapai le 'help to not forget any things' bhanda 'helps me remember important tasks' jasto bhanna saknuhunchha. 5 sentence bhitra nai uttar dina prayas garnu.

例: Actually, I am a student, so I don't have a regular job. However, when I have tasks to do, I make a list because it helps me remember important things. This method works well for me and keeps me organized.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi grammar ra word choice ko samasya chha. 'Eligible to remember' bhanda 'good at remembering' bhannu ramro hunchha. Sentence haru lai thap spasht ra sangaathit banau, ra linking words jastai 'for example', 'so', 'but' ko prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau. 5 sentence bhitra nai uttar dina prayas garnu.

例: I think it depends on personal preference. For example, some people have a good memory and can remember things easily, so they don't like making lists because it takes time. But others find it difficult to remember everything, so they prefer to make lists to stay organized.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma 'PayPal' ko thau ma 'paper' huna parcha. Arko kura, 'easy to watch and just buy the thing' bhannu ko thau ma 'easy to check and buy items' bhannu ramro hunchha. Sentence haru lai spasht ra sangaathit banau, ra linking words ko prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau. 5 sentence bhitra nai uttar dina prayas garnu.

例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone rather than on paper because I always carry my phone with me. It is very convenient to check the list anytime and buy the items easily. Using a phone also helps me keep my list organized and updated.

× Yes, we usually make list while doing a shopping because I think that it's necessary.

✓ Yes, we usually make lists while shopping because I think that it's necessary.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' because it refers to multiple instances of making a list. Also, 'a shopping' is incorrect; 'shopping' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article.

× Also while doing a shopping we may forgot something to bought at that time.

✓ Also, while shopping, we may forget something to buy at that time.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense but should be present tense 'forget' to match 'may'. Also, 'to bought' is incorrect; the base form 'buy' should be used after 'to'.

× When we look over the list and the glossaries that we taken, we can be able to find more satisfied level of sobbing at that time.

✓ When we look over the list and the glossaries that we have taken, we can find a more satisfactory level of shopping at that time.

The phrase 'that we taken' is missing the auxiliary verb 'have' for present perfect tense. 'Can be able to' is redundant; 'can' or 'be able to' alone is sufficient. 'Satisfied level of sobbing' is incorrect; it should be 'a more satisfactory level of shopping'.

× So me and my mother used to do it.

✓ So my mother and I used to do it.

The pronoun 'me' should be 'I' as the subject of the sentence. Also, the order 'my mother and I' is more appropriate.

× Actually, I'm not into our work, I'm a student.

✓ Actually, I'm not into work; I'm a student.

The phrase 'our work' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to work in general, not shared work. 'Into work' is the correct expression.

× So yeah, I make a list if I do work because I as I said, that it's important and it's help to not forget any things, which is important and basically made people more.

✓ So yeah, I make a list if I do work because, as I said, it's important and it helps not to forget anything, which is important and basically helps people more.

'It's help' should be 'it helps' to agree with singular subject. 'Any things' should be 'anything' as an uncountable pronoun. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I think that it's all about the personal preference.

✓ I think that it's all about personal preference.

The article 'the' before 'personal preference' is unnecessary; 'personal preference' is an uncountable noun phrase here.

× For example, some people are very good at remembering at that time they can memorize the things very well.

✓ For example, some people are very good at remembering; at that time, they can memorize things very well.

A semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses. Also, 'the things' should be 'things' without 'the' for general reference.

× So they don't like to get into trouble while making a list and it take a time.

✓ So they don't like to get into trouble while making a list, and it takes time.

'It take a time' should be 'it takes time' for subject-verb agreement and correct expression. A comma before 'and' is appropriate to separate clauses.

× Well, some are not that much eligible to remember the things, so they make.

✓ Well, some are not that good at remembering things, so they make lists.

'Eligible' is incorrect here; 'good at' is the correct phrase. 'The things' should be 'things' and the sentence is completed with 'lists' for clarity.

× I prefer making list in a mobile phone rather than a PayPal because we usually carry our mobile everywhere we went at that time.

✓ I prefer making lists on a mobile phone rather than on paper because we usually carry our mobile everywhere we go.

'Making list' should be 'making lists' plural. 'PayPal' is incorrect; likely meant 'paper'. 'Everywhere we went at that time' should be 'everywhere we go' for present tense consistency.

× It's very easy to watch and just buy the thing.

✓ It's very easy to check and just buy things.

'Watch' is incorrect here; 'check' or 'look at' is more appropriate. 'The thing' should be 'things' for general reference.