List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、より自然で簡潔な表現に改善できます。例えば、"saves and time and money"は"saves time and money"が正しいです。また、"extra extra money for spending ex spending unnecessary items"は冗長でわかりにくいので、簡潔に表現しましょう。

例: I usually make a shopping list because it helps me save time and money by avoiding unnecessary purchases.

提案: 回答は内容が明確で構成も良いですが、"complete my journeys"は文脈に合わない表現です。より適切な語彙を使い、自然な表現にしましょう。

例: I usually make a list for my work, especially when I feel busy. It helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget any important tasks. By having a clear list, I can manage my time better and complete my tasks more efficiently.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。文章を簡潔にし、文法を正しく使うことが必要です。また、具体的な理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they are not good at organizing tasks, or they prefer to finish tasks quickly and see making lists as a waste of time.

提案: 回答はよく構成されていますが、"help me improve"は三人称単数に合わせて"helps me improve"に修正しましょう。また、"lesson paper"は"lesson plan"や"notes"の方が自然です。

例: I prefer to make a list on paper because I'm not very good at typing on my phone. Also, I have heard that writing things down by hand helps me improve my memory. For example, when I write notes by hand, I tend to remember the tasks better than when I use my phone.

× I tried to make a list when I go shopping because it saves and time and money and I don't have to use extra extra money for spending ex spending unnecessary items.

✓ I try to make a list when I go shopping because it saves time and money and I don't have to spend extra money on unnecessary items.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'tried' (past tense) with 'go' (present tense), causing tense inconsistency. Also, 'saves and time and money' is incorrect; it should be 'saves time and money'. The phrase 'use extra extra money for spending ex spending unnecessary items' is awkward and redundant; it should be 'spend extra money on unnecessary items'. To improve, maintain consistent present tense and correct phrase usage.

× I usually make a list for my work, especially when I feel busy. It helps me stay organized and ensure that I don't forget any important tasks. By having a clear list, I can manage my time better and complete my journeys more efficiently.

✓ I usually make a list for my work, especially when I feel busy. It helps me stay organized and ensures that I don't forget any important tasks. By having a clear list, I can manage my time better and complete my tasks more efficiently.

The verb 'ensure' should be 'ensures' to agree with the singular subject 'It' (third person singular issue). Also, 'journeys' is incorrect in this context; 'tasks' is appropriate. Correct subject-verb agreement and appropriate noun choice improve clarity.

× I think they are both type of people who that who who doesn't like making lists. The one that the person who is not good at organizing task. The other is that the person who tries to complete tasks tasks as soon as possible. They think to making lists is a waste of time.

✓ I think there are two types of people who don't like making lists. One type is people who are not good at organizing tasks. The other type is people who try to complete tasks as soon as possible. They think making lists is a waste of time.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain redundant and incorrect phrases such as 'both type', 'who that who who', and repeated words. Correct sentence structure requires clear subject-verb-object order and removal of redundancies. Also, 'to making lists' is incorrect; it should be 'making lists'. Improving sentence clarity and grammar is necessary.

× I prefer to make a list on paper because I'm not very good at typing on my phone. Also, I have heard that writing things down by hand help me improve my memory. For example, when I write a lesson paper, I tend to remember the tasks better than when I use my phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because I'm not very good at typing on my phone. Also, I have heard that writing things down by hand helps me improve my memory. For example, when I write on paper, I tend to remember the tasks better than when I use my phone.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'writing things down by hand'. The phrase 'write a lesson paper' is incorrect; it should be 'write on paper'. Correct verb agreement and preposition usage improve sentence accuracy.