List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to limit your answer to 3-4 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list before I go out. This helps me buy things quickly without wasting time. Moreover, it keeps me organized and focused on what I need to purchase.

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words to explain how making lists helps you work effectively. Keep your sentences concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I usually make a list before starting any tasks. This helps me stay organized and ensures I complete everything correctly. As a result, I work more efficiently without wasting time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Some people do not like making lists because they want to relax and enjoy their time while shopping. Instead of rushing, they prefer to browse freely and have fun in the shopping center.

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs to be more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

例: I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more convenient than carrying paper. Since I always have my smartphone with me, I can easily access my list anytime I need it.

× Yes, I most of the time before going for shopping, I make a list so that I can uh buy things as quick as possible without wasting time and also I remain organized and uh, select things in a short time.

✓ Yes, most of the time before going shopping, I make a list so that I can buy things as quickly as possible without wasting time and also remain organized and select things in a short time.

The phrase 'before going for shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'before going shopping'. Also, 'as quick as possible' should be 'as quickly as possible' because 'quickly' is the adverb modifying the verb 'buy'. The word 'I' before 'most of the time' is unnecessary and removed for fluency.

× Yes, I usually make A at least before taking any tasks or doing any work which help me organize and, uh, make ensure that I am doing everything correctly without wasting any time, uh, any effective manner.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list at least before taking any tasks or doing any work which helps me organize and ensure that I am doing everything correctly without wasting any time or being ineffective.

The phrase 'make A at least' is unclear and likely a mistake; it should be 'make a list at least'. Also, 'help me organize and, uh, make ensure' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me organize and ensure'. The verb 'help' must agree with singular subject 'which' so 'helps' is correct. 'Any effective manner' is incorrect; it should be 'or being ineffective' or similar to express the intended meaning.

× Don't you have enough time and they looking for relaxation and amusement in a shopping center? They don't generally make any list because their purpose is to go and enjoy the movement in shopping center by doing shopping rather to do it in a hurry.

✓ They don't have enough time and are looking for relaxation and amusement in a shopping center. They generally don't make any list because their purpose is to go and enjoy the moment in the shopping center by shopping rather than doing it in a hurry.

The original sentence is confusing and incorrectly structured. 'Don't you have enough time and they looking' is incorrect; it should be 'They don't have enough time and are looking'. 'Enjoy the movement' should be 'enjoy the moment'. 'By doing shopping rather to do it in a hurry' should be 'by shopping rather than doing it in a hurry'. Also, 'any list' is better as 'a list' or 'any lists' but 'any list' is acceptable here.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because carrying paper is not convenient. Uh, will I carry my smartphone knowledge with me so I can access the information, the required things from my phone that is more convenient and.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because carrying paper is not convenient. I always carry my smartphone with me so I can access the information and the required things from my phone, which is more convenient.

The phrase 'will I carry my smartphone knowledge with me' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I always carry my smartphone with me'. Also, 'that is more convenient and.' is incomplete; it should be 'which is more convenient.' The preposition 'on' is correctly used with 'make a list on my phone'.