List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ очень хороший, но можно улучшить связность, используя более разнообразные связующие слова, например, "because" или "so" для более плавного перехода между предложениями.

例: Yes, I usually make a list before I go shopping because it helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget any important items. For instance, when I shop for groceries, having a list saves me time and prevents me from buying unnecessary things.

提案: Ответ хороший, но стоит избегать небольших ошибок, например, "organize and focus it" лучше заменить на "organize and focus on my work". Также можно добавить связующее слово для плавности.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me organize and focus on my tasks. For example, by listing tasks in order of priority, I can manage my time more efficiently and avoid forgetting important duties. Therefore, making a list definitely improves my productivity.

提案: В вашем ответе есть грамматические ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Рекомендуется улучшить структуру предложений и использовать более точные выражения, а также избегать лишних междометий.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find them restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous way to organize their tasks. Additionally, some may feel that lists create unnecessary pressure or stress, especially if they struggle to complete all the tasks. For example, a person who enjoys flexibility might avoid making lists.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и грамматику, например, заменить "making this" на "making lists" и объединить предложения для лучшей плавности.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and accessible. For example, I can easily add or delete items anytime without worrying about losing paper. Also, using my phone helps me stay organized since I always have it with me.

× some people dislike making list because they find it restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous approach to organizing their task.

✓ some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous approach to organizing their tasks.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' because it refers to the general concept of multiple lists. Similarly, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the plural subject 'some people' and to indicate multiple tasks. This ensures subject-noun agreement and clarity.

× some may feel that less an unnecessary pressure or stress, especially if they struggle to complete all the times.

✓ some may feel that there is unnecessary pressure or stress, especially if they struggle to complete all the tasks.

The phrase 'less an unnecessary pressure' is incorrect. 'Less' is used with uncountable nouns without 'an'. Also, 'pressure' and 'stress' are uncountable and do not need 'an'. The sentence needs 'there is' to introduce the existence of pressure or stress. 'All the times' is incorrect; it should be 'all the tasks' to refer to multiple duties.

× I usually make a list for my work because it helps me to organize and focus it.

✓ I usually make a list for my work because it helps me to organize and focus on it.

The verb 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' when indicating the object of focus. Omitting 'on' makes the sentence grammatically incorrect. Adding 'on' clarifies that the focus is directed towards 'it' (the work).

× And additionally, some may feel that less an unnecessary pressure or stress, especially if they struggle to complete all the times.

✓ Additionally, some may feel unnecessary pressure or stress, especially if they struggle to complete all the tasks.

Starting a sentence with 'And additionally' is redundant and awkward. 'Additionally' alone is sufficient as a transition. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing 'that less an' and simplifying the phrase to 'feel unnecessary pressure or stress'. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.