List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (verb forms, articles), and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes — I always make a shopping list because I like to stay organized. For example, when I skip a list I tend to forget essentials and end up buying unnecessary items, so the list saves time and money.

提案: Improve grammar and word choice (use effective, prioritise), produce a clear topic sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like 'for me' and keep response under five sentences.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list at work because it helps me prioritise urgent tasks. As a result, I can focus on what must be finished that day and schedule less urgent tasks for later.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear, specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct grammar (avoid double negatives, improve phrasing) and explain consequences or examples briefly.

例: Some people dislike lists because they prefer spontaneity and find schedules restrictive. For instance, students or creative workers may feel less stressed and more inspired when they follow their ideas rather than a strict plan.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition; correct grammar (use 'Reminders' or 'reminder app', 'what I need to do', 'on time'). Give one specific advantage and an example of how it helps. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because the Reminders app alerts me at the right time and syncs with my calendar. For example, it warns me about today’s errands so I don't forget urgent tasks.

× Yes, I am a person who always write down the list when I go to shopping.

✓ Yes, I am a person who always write down the list when I go shopping.

The original sentence has an unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'go'. The correct collocation is 'go shopping' not 'go to shopping'. Remove 'to' to fix the phrase. Also note 'write' could be 'writes' only if subject were third person singular; here 'I' is correct so 'write' stays the same.

× I am a person who likes to organize and remember the things that I need to do.

✓ I am a person who likes to organize and remember the things I need to do.

Omitting the relative pronoun 'that' before 'I need to do' is optional; however the phrase 'the things that I need to do' is grammatical. The suggested correction removes an unnecessary word for conciseness. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a grammatical error.

× So if I didn't write down the things that I need to buy when I go to the grocery store, then I will forget and buy a bunch of things that are unnecessary.

✓ So if I don't write down the things I need to buy when I go to the grocery store, I will forget and buy a bunch of unnecessary things.

The conditional mixes past tense 'didn't' with a present/future result. For a real conditional about habitual future consequences, use present simple in the if-clause: 'if I don't write down...'. Also change word order to 'a bunch of unnecessary things' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I will always write down the list when I go to work.

✓ Yes, I always write a list when I go to work.

Using 'will' for habitual actions is unnatural. Use present simple 'I always write' to express routine. Also 'write down the list' is awkward; 'write a list' or 'write one down' is more natural.

× I think it is very effectable because I can priority the things that need to be done immediately and the things that can wait for a bit of time.

✓ I think it is very effective because I can prioritize the things that need to be done immediately and the things that can wait a bit.

The word 'effectable' is incorrect; use the adjective 'effective'. 'Priority' is a noun; the correct verb is 'prioritize'. Also 'wait for a bit of time' is wordy; 'wait a bit' is clearer.

× So yes, I think making a list for me when I'm working, it's really important to me.

✓ So yes, I think making a list while I'm working is really important to me.

The original sentence has a redundant comma and awkward structure with 'for me' and 'to me' repeated. Combine ideas into a single clause: 'making a list while I'm working is really important to me.' This removes redundancy and fixes sentence flow.

× I think some people don't like to make lists because they are more flexible and they don't like to organize their time.

✓ I think some people don't like to make lists because they prefer to be more flexible and don't like to organize their time.

The original 'they are more flexible' is understandable but 'prefer to be more flexible' clarifies the preference. This improves meaning; pronoun use is acceptable but sentence benefits from clearer phrasing.

× They simply just do whatever they think of and by not creating a list can decrease the pressure of not following the list.

✓ They simply do whatever they think of, and not creating a list can reduce the pressure of having to follow one.

Remove redundant 'simply just' (both mean same). Reorder the second part for clarity: 'not creating a list can reduce the pressure of having to follow one.' Use 'reduce' instead of 'decrease' for natural collocation and 'one' to refer to 'list'.

× There's an app called reminder on my phone and it will remind you what need you need to do on the time and it will also display on my calendar.

✓ There is an app called Reminder on my phone that reminds me what I need to do and also displays my tasks on my calendar.

Use 'there is' full form for formality and capitalize app name 'Reminder'. Replace 'you' with 'me' to match speaker perspective. 'What need you need to do on the time' is ungrammatical; correct to 'what I need to do' and 'also displays my tasks on my calendar.' Use present simple for a habitual function of the app.

× So I can just check my calendar to see if there's anything that I need to need to done by need to be done by today.

✓ So I can just check my calendar to see if there's anything I need to get done today.

Original repeats phrases and misuses verb forms ('need to need to done by need to be done by'). Simplify to 'anything I need to get done today.' Use base verb 'get done' or 'do' after 'need to' and remove repetition.