List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, remove filler phrases and fix tense/word order errors (e.g., “go shopping,” “check whether we have something,” “buy whatever we need”).

例: Yes. I usually make a shopping list before I go because it helps me remember household items. However, when I'm in a hurry I sometimes skip the list and end up buying things at random.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and a concise example of how the list helps; correct phrasing and tense (e.g., “a to-do list,” “from more to less priority,” “I try to follow deadlines”). Use one linking word to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like “works a lot.”

例: Yes. I make a to-do list for work, ordering tasks from high to low priority. For example, by following deadlines I finish urgent reports first, which saves time and reduces stress.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence and give a specific reason with a linking word. Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., “time-consuming,” “doesn't help them”). You can also give a short example of an alternative method people use.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find the process time-consuming and think it doesn't help. For instance, busy people may prefer relying on memory or digital reminders instead.

提案: Keep the answer clear and grammatical: state preference, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases (e.g., “dandelions,” “open my door”). Correct pronouns and verb forms. Use linking words like “because” or “so.”

例: I prefer paper lists because writing by hand makes me feel more confident and I can see the list on my desk or in my notebook. Also, crossing items off on paper gives me a greater sense of progress.

× Yes, most of the time before I go for shopping I try to make a list about what we need for our house.

✓ Yes, most of the time before I go shopping I try to make a list of what we need for our house.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; use 'go shopping'. Also 'a list about what' is awkward; use 'a list of what'. This fixes idiomatic verb usage and improves sentence structure. Suggestion: use 'go shopping' and 'a list of ...' to sound natural.

× So but sometimes when I'm in a hurry I cannot just check whether we have or not.

✓ But sometimes when I'm in a hurry I cannot just check whether we have it or not.

The clause 'check whether we have or not' omits the object 'it'. Adding 'it' clarifies the noun being checked. Also starting with 'So but' is redundant; use 'But' for clarity.

× So we randomly and go for shopping and buy whatever we need.

✓ So we randomly go shopping and buy whatever we need.

Remove the extraneous 'and' after 'randomly' and use 'go shopping' (not 'go for shopping'). This corrects word order and idiomatic usage.

× Yes, I usually do A to do list for my work tasks and from more prior to the less prior tasks.

✓ Yes, I usually make a to-do list for my work tasks, ordering tasks from more important to less important.

Use 'make a to-do list' not 'do A to do list'. 'More prior' and 'less prior' are incorrect collocations; use 'more important' and 'less important' or 'higher priority' and 'lower priority'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I tried to follow according to due times and I think it works a lot.

✓ I try to follow the due dates/times and I think it works well.

The original mixes past 'tried' with present context. Use present tense 'try' to match ongoing habit. 'Follow according to due times' is unnatural; use 'follow the due dates/times'. 'Works a lot' is informal and unclear; use 'works well'.

× One reason behind why some people don't enjoy, uh, listing the task or things to do might be because they find this process time consuming and they don't really believe that it's actually helps them.

✓ One reason some people don't enjoy listing tasks might be that they find the process time-consuming and don't believe it actually helps them.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'behind why'. Use 'listing tasks' (plural) and hyphenate 'time-consuming'. Replace 'because they find... and they don't really believe that it's actually helps them' with 'might be that they find... and don't believe it actually helps them' to correct clause structure and remove incorrect 'it's helps' (subject-verb issue).

× I'm more of a traditional person than a modern 1, so I prefer using paper to make lists because I feels me more confident and comfortable while you're writing dandelions and I can see them whenever I open my door or notebook.

✓ I'm more of a traditional person than a modern one, so I prefer using paper to make lists because it makes me feel more confident and comfortable while I'm writing, and I can see them whenever I open my diary or notebook.

Replace '1' with 'one'. Change 'I feels me more confident' to 'it makes me feel more confident' to correct pronoun and verb agreement. 'You're writing dandelions' is likely mis-said; replace with 'I'm writing' and 'diary' or 'notebook' instead of 'door'. This corrects pronoun use, verb form, and word choice to make the meaning clear.