List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repeating phrases and minor grammar errors (e.g., "make list" → "make a list"). Use linking words if adding details (e.g., "so" or "because").

例: Yes — I always make a shopping list. I usually use a notes app on my phone because it’s convenient, but sometimes I write a quick list on paper if I’m planning a big meal.

提案: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus two supporting details and reduce hesitations. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "next day work" → "the next day’s work", "whenever I forget to make a lift" → likely "make a list"). Use linking words such as "because" and "so" to show cause and effect and give a specific example of how the list helps.

例: Yes — I make a list for my work because it helps me remember tasks for the next day. For example, when I list the materials I need and the steps to do, I rarely forget anything, so my tasks don’t get delayed.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give two specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar ("it's depend" → "it depends", "their mind are sharp" → "they have a sharp memory"). Avoid calling people "lazy" — choose neutral phrasing. Provide a brief example or contrast.

例: It depends. Some people don’t make lists because they have a sharp memory and prefer to remember tasks mentally, while others avoid lists because they feel it wastes time. For instance, a busy manager might keep everything in their head, whereas a student might find lists more helpful.

提案: Give a clear preference sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "so". Use correct phrases ("easy to use" not "easy to consume") and avoid filler words. Mention a short example of an app or feature if possible.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it’s easy to use and I can update items quickly. For example, I use a notes app that syncs across devices, so I always have my list when I’m shopping.

× I usually make a list whenever I go for shopping.

✓ I usually make a list whenever I go shopping.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect in standard English. After 'go' when referring to activities like shopping, use the base noun form 'shopping' without 'for'. Suggestion: say 'go shopping' or 'go shopping for groceries'.

× I make list on my mobile phone as well as on the paper.

✓ I make a list on my mobile phone as well as on paper.

Missing article 'a' before 'list' and unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'paper'. Use 'a list' for a countable noun and 'on paper' (no article) when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'I make a list on my mobile phone and on paper.'

× Yeah, it's very helpful for me, uh, to make a list for the next day work.

✓ Yeah, it's very helpful for me to make a list for the next day's work.

Possessive form is needed: 'next day work' should be 'next day's work'. This is not a tense error strictly but fits present tense/context. Suggestion: use the genitive form for time expressions: 'the next day's work.'

× Uh, it's helped me to, uh, find out, uh, material for, uh, for, uh, another day work.

✓ It has helped me to find material for another day's work.

Use present perfect 'has helped' instead of 'it's helped' spelled out but contraction is okay; more importantly 'find out material' is unnatural—use 'find material'. Also use possessive 'another day's work'. Suggestion: 'It has helped me find material for another day's work.'

× I saw many time, uh, whenever I forget to make a lift, uh, the work get uh, pending.

✓ I have seen many times that whenever I forget to make a list, the work gets pending.

Several errors: 'saw many time' should be present perfect 'have seen many times' for repeated past experience with present relevance; 'lift' is wrong word—should be 'list'; subject-verb agreement: 'the work gets pending' needs 'gets' (singular) and 'pending' is awkward but acceptable; better: 'the work becomes pending' or 'work remains pending.' Suggestion: 'I have seen many times that whenever I forget to make a list, the work remains pending.'

× So every day for the next day, I make a list.

✓ So every day for the next day, I make a list.

Sentence is acceptable but slightly redundant. No grammatical correction needed besides style: better 'So every evening I make a list for the next day.' This item is kept only if considered stylistic; no change required.

× Yeah, it's depend on the people, because some people mind, their mind are sharp, so they usually, uh, remember all the things for their next day work in their mind.

✓ Yeah, it depends on the people, because some people's minds are sharp, so they usually remember all the things for their next day's work.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it depends' (needs 's'). Possessive needed: 'some people's minds' instead of 'some people mind, their mind'. Also 'mind are' should be 'minds are' (plural). Use possessive 'next day's work'. Suggestion: 'It depends on the person; some people's minds are sharp, so they remember everything for the next day.'

× And some of them are lazy, uh, they do not want to make a list.

✓ And some of them are lazy; they do not want to make a list.

Grammatically correct; recommend replacing comma splice with semicolon or splitting into two sentences. No tense change needed. Suggestion: 'Some of them are lazy, so they do not want to make a list.'

× They think it's a wastage of time.

✓ They think it's a waste of time.

'Wastage' is possible but uncommon in this context; native speakers use 'a waste of time.' Suggestion: say 'a waste of time.'

× Yeah, I, uh, prefer to make a list on mobile phone because, uh, uh, it's uh, very easy to consume with me.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone because it's very easy for me to use.

Problems: missing possessive 'my' before 'mobile phone'; 'consume with me' is incorrect — intended meaning 'convenient for me to use.' Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone because it's very easy for me to use.'

× And uh, nowadays, uh, it's very difficult to find a paper whenever to make a list.

✓ Nowadays it's very difficult to find paper when you want to make a list.

'Find a paper' is incorrect—use 'find paper' or 'find a sheet of paper' depending on meaning. 'Whenever to make a list' is ungrammatical; use 'when you want to make a list' or 'when I want to make a list.' Suggestion: 'Nowadays it's hard to find paper when I want to make a list.'

× So I prefer a mobile phone.

✓ So I prefer using my mobile phone.

Use 'prefer using my mobile phone' or 'prefer my mobile phone' with possessive 'my'. 'Prefer a mobile phone' is odd in context. Suggestion: 'So I prefer to use my mobile phone.'